Brain Dead (prod. By oDD)

[solara]

this track is produced by odd who's also a member of trshady
http://soundcloud.com/abdulghany/brain-dead-prod-by-odd
let me know what u think
rate the verses and chorus out of 10
tell me what u like abt it and what u hate..
thanks!

[_Ironic_]

listenin

beat - decent

aight, your delivery was okay, the flow was horrible though, you totally tried to fit too much in frequently

hook was horrible, you don't sound comfortable

lyrics weren't anything special

not too much I enjoyed about this song tbh, sorry

2/10

check out my thread plz

[CorrosionCover]

For me the flow was fine but chorus was just horrible. Well I got the picture of whole idea, just a bit more work on it

Keep going man

[Jaz]

I don't like it. I don't know what else to say really.

[Elkemis]

The beat is nice. Delivery was OK but you need to work harder on the flow, I don't feel it, some part sounds like you're rushing to spit the lyric. The hook is bad.

[Mr. Chambers]

link of feedback (leave a link to someone elses song who you left feedback to)?

[WesTMusiK]

Ummm, don't take this the wrong way.

Your flow was awful. You forced ALOT of lines and you just seemed waaayyy too hesitant while you were spitting. Loosen up and get comfortable and this may sound corny but, have fun when you spit.

Hook was ... Ummm ... Terrible. 'Nuff said.

I don't want to sound like a dick but you have ALOT and I mean ALOT of work to do before you become decent in my books. But hey, atleast you have the balls to post your shit on here with an attempt to get criticized and get better in the long run and I respect that very much.

1/10. The 1 is for effort.

[solara]

well abt the hook, i know its not good coz its unfinished work, and i lost the vocals so i just posted it
didnt think it wud get so much criticism.. so yea the chorus sucked
but abt my flow and me tryin to fit so many words.. i mean most of these lines are quite clear and fall right over the beat..so its just switching flows and low quality that bothered u
and i know this track got no punches i was just flowing..i wasnt tryna go lyrical on this one
and abt me sounding like im nt havin fun recordin, well i can see people say my delivery was okay
which means it was entertaining
i tend to switch alot of flows which is hard work, plus the quality was sort of a problem..
moreover its not my native tongue
but hey thanks! i be updating the link after fixing the hook, but enough with this song
i be recording something better to show my lyrical skills, with less flow switching, no speeding up
peace!

[WesTMusiK]

well abt the hook, i know its not good coz its unfinished work, and i lost the vocals so i just posted it
didnt think it wud get so much criticism.. so yea the chorus sucked
but abt my flow and me tryin to fit so many words.. i mean most of these lines are quite clear and fall right over the beat..so its just switching flows and low quality that bothered u
and i know this track got no punches i was just flowing..i wasnt tryna go lyrical on this one
and abt me sounding like im nt havin fun recordin, well i can see people say my delivery was okay
which means it was entertaining
i tend to switch alot of flows which is hard work, plus the quality was sort of a problem..
moreover its not my native tongue
but hey thanks! i be updating the link after fixing the hook, but enough with this song
i be recording something better to show my lyrical skills, with less flow switching, no speeding up
peace!

But understand. There's a difference between forcing and rapping fast. You were forcing, not really switching up flows. I'm not trying to sound mean but you think you have it figured out when in reality, you're not remotely close to being up there in any shape or form. Good thing to be confident, but it's another to have a big head. And with the you not sounding like you're having fun ... I stand by that statement. You were very monotone and there was no real emphasis on any words.

[solara]

monotone? the first 8 bars of the song my tone switched more than one time.. lol
and again abt forcing lines, as long as i can hear my words clear and they fall right over the beat
i dont think its an issue.. but anyway thanks for the feedback!