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Just Fuckin'Round

Postby Tash8 » Jan 19th, '11, 21:46

1, 2 and 3,4
I'm feeling so greaat, when i record
I'm wavin to the haaters by the seashore
SB, BABY, same friends in the bay
though in different decor
but still CA like tupac shakur (of course)
I got the L's blazin till my eyes turned asian
and become more red than a burnt caucausion
I got an urge to curse each word of my verse
fucka fucka,muhafucka, you can sucka my dick
oh my bad, bitch
so much for MTV, like I give a shit,
I spit a little wit, and you say it ain't shit
but I see your jaw drop like you saw my dick
I'm young fresh n cocky, on some brett farve shit
I'm sending nude pics to these girls i wanna fuck wit


just a quick verse, any feed and i'll return
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Re: Just Fuckin'Round

Postby WakeUpShow » Jan 19th, '11, 21:51

i thought the rhyming could have been more complex, and there was some random lines that didn't fit (like the 12 and 34, and the seashore ones)
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Re: Just Fuckin'Round

Postby Tash8 » Jan 19th, '11, 22:02

Cosh wrote:i thought the rhyming could have been more complex, and there was some random lines that didn't fit (like the 12 and 34, and the seashore ones)



sorry it's not 12 and 34...

it's 1, 2, and 3, 4!

the seashore one makes perfect sense to me, cause it's SB--santa barbara (where i live now, it's a beach)

and this wasn't about the rhymes, it was about the punchlines, but it's cool..thx
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Re: Just Fuckin'Round

Postby WakeUpShow » Jan 19th, '11, 23:27

Tash8 wrote:
Cosh wrote:i thought the rhyming could have been more complex, and there was some random lines that didn't fit (like the 12 and 34, and the seashore ones)



sorry it's not 12 and 34...

it's 1, 2, and 3, 4!

the seashore one makes perfect sense to me, cause it's SB--santa barbara (where i live now, it's a beach)

and this wasn't about the rhymes, it was about the punchlines, but it's cool..thx

haha did u add the commas?
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Re: Just Fuckin'Round

Postby Tash8 » Jan 19th, '11, 23:42

Cosh wrote:
Tash8 wrote:
Cosh wrote:i thought the rhyming could have been more complex, and there was some random lines that didn't fit (like the 12 and 34, and the seashore ones)



sorry it's not 12 and 34...

it's 1, 2, and 3, 4!

the seashore one makes perfect sense to me, cause it's SB--santa barbara (where i live now, it's a beach)

and this wasn't about the rhymes, it was about the punchlines, but it's cool..thx

haha did u add the commas?


yeah, i did so it made sense
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