Fast Writing

[Mahmoud48]

i wrote this in 10 minutes u know just warming up just rhyming
doesnt really have any meaning to it
it might flow weird becuz i stop and sometimes stretch out words
Its also not done and i didnt bother to finsh it since its going no where

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i was riding on my bike last night when i saw a dyke
i was like ur looking good giving me wood
but i should nt really come out as a creeper a
man with dignity i just sneak a lil peak at that ass
i asked if she got friends at thats when it began
the plot is commencing operation blind spot
ready to start rot ting my brain with ill thoughts
i didn't know raping was going to be so easy
skull, titty fucking till my dick got queezy
she is so sleazy please dont be preggy the next day
cuz i didnt wear a comdom for fuck sakes
she wakes up with a headache cuz i spike..her drank
to bad she didnt see it coming now she running out the house
didnt bother chasing her cause

[classthe_king]

You only rhymed 3 times

[Mahmoud48]

You only rhymed 3 times

really i thought it was more

i was riding on my bike last night when i saw a dyke
i was like ur looking good giving me wood
but i shouldn't really come out as a creeper a
man with dignity i just sneak a lil peak at that ass
i asked if she got friends at thats when it began
the plot is commencing operation blind spot
ready to start rotting my brain with ill thoughts
i didn't know raping was going to be so easy
skull, titty fucking till my dick got queezy
she is so sleazy please dont be preggy the next day
cuz i didnt wear a comdom for fuck sakes
she wakes up with a headache cuz i spike..her drank
to bad she didnt see it coming now she running out the house
didnt bother chasing her cause

i know its not the best i can do and i dont even like it but it did have more then 3 ryhmes

[classthe_king]

You can't just rhyme random words in the verse

The only rhymes that count are spot/thought, easy/queezy, day/sakes

[Mahmoud48]

You can't just rhyme random words in the verse

The only rhymes that count are spot/thought, easy/queezy, day/sakes

really? im still trying to get better, thx for clearing that out for me

[DƎRDYPK]

this made me lol some but thats a good thing

i didn't know raping was going to be so easy
skull, titty fucking till my dick got queezy
she is so sleazy please dont be preggy the next day
cuz i didnt wear a comdom for fuck sakes
she wakes up with a headache cuz i spike..her drank
to bad she didnt see it coming now she running out the house
didnt bother chasing her cause

at 1st I thought the raping was meant to be "rapping" but this was just swagging
she's leaving the house & whatcha gonna do...you don't know? well shit me either

you gonna run after her & get her?...the fuck...why you gotta leave a lil cliffhanger ending like that?

still a good try tho you get the beer in ya hot cocoa bra
keep at it

[Mahmoud48]

this made me lol some but thats a good thing

i didn't know raping was going to be so easy
skull, titty fucking till my dick got queezy
she is so sleazy please dont be preggy the next day
cuz i didnt wear a comdom for fuck sakes
she wakes up with a headache cuz i spike..her drank
to bad she didnt see it coming now she running out the house
didnt bother chasing her cause

at 1st I thought the raping was meant to be "rapping" but this was just swagging
she's leaving the house & whatcha gonna do...you don't know? well shit me either

you gonna run after her & get her?...the fuck...why you gotta leave a lil cliffhanger ending like that?

still a good try tho you get the beer in ya hot cocoa bra
keep at it

everytime i read this i laugh

[gutawafang]

you gonna run after her & get her?...the fuck...why you gotta leave a lil cliffhanger ending like that?

Yup my ending. LOL.