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Tornado: Mental Asylum

Postby Tornado » Feb 7th, '11, 14:07

Also check out the info thread for "Raw As Fuck" here viewtopic.php?f=54&t=107699

Produced by: Bankz. Recorded by: Bankz @ Bankz’s studio. Lyrics & Mixed by: Tornado

(1st Verse) This the mental asylum/ is the place you arrived in/ and just so you know/ every lunatic is hiding like/ creatures of the night in place/ it’s designed in mud/ this is our field/ step here, you dying/ stop the goddam crying/ cos the things our minds in/ is torture, murder murder/ so ain’t no denying/ ain’t nothing surviving/ we hungry and conniving/ you can’t go home though/ all our victims trying/ lock em up in cages/ let them feel the hatred/ of what we suffered/ now it’s turn to play the game if/ we were the hunters/ and you were the prey/ some victims can’t take it/ some try and get away/ through escaping or suicide/ but if you stuck here and ain’t murdered/ you start to get crazy here/ now you can join the legion/ or get murdered slow/ you can’t blame us blud/ this the only thing we know

(Hook) Try and try me/ cos our minds be/ oh fucked up/ and oh so grimey/ hoodlum I be/ you can’t hide see/ play the game or quickly die (×2)

(Post Hook) We creatures of the night/ we are lurking around (lurking around, lurking around)/best watch your step/ you get murked with no sound (murked with no sound, murked with no sound)/ no matter what you do/ the big curse is around (curse is around, curse is around)/ so you can either join/ or get murked by us now (murked by us now, murked by us now)

Mental Asylum
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Re: Tornado: Mental Asylum

Postby DƎRDYPK » Feb 7th, '11, 14:20

i like this
lol @ "if this track had a video it would look like this"
that was sick though
real laid back track but still wicked at the same time :b:
I'm real interested in hearing Raw as Fuck
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Re: Tornado: Mental Asylum

Postby Tornado » Feb 7th, '11, 16:32

Cheers Derdy bruv for checking :worship:
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Re: Tornado: Mental Asylum

Postby Scrubz » Feb 7th, '11, 16:44

Alright, track was a little boring not much energy in it which kinda disappointed me. I really liked the beat and your flow at times. Both the delivery and flow could use work, it was shaky threw out. I also think you need to annunciate your words better, they sound a bit hmmm... Slopy.

As for the theme and intro and outro.... Pretty sick bro, have to give it to you there. Keep practicing, keep at it and keep improving :y:

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Re: Tornado: Mental Asylum

Postby B.A.D. » Feb 8th, '11, 01:37

The hook is a masterpiece, damn I love the idea of it :worship: :worship: :worship:

I liked it, short long song tho', I dont like it like that, that its a long song but its only 1 verse, 1 hook & a bridge... you could maybe add a little more... I dunno, a guitar solo at least. Cuz like someone above me said, it makes it pretti boring.

the verse was good, I like the imagery you project with your rhymes, the lyrics are cool. I liked it.
nice lil track, I loved the hook.
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Re: Tornado: Mental Asylum

Postby Tranquil » Feb 8th, '11, 08:35

woah!

im surprised by this, this is fucking dope for real, :o

the intro is good as, really put me in the mood for some dark shit, and that you delivered :worship:

the hook is speechless, that shit is great!

also i love the cover aswell :happy:

your flow and everything was great, i can complain one bit on this song man!!

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Re: Tornado: Mental Asylum

Postby Steve Spag » Feb 9th, '11, 23:53

Like Wasnut said it's a good track it just lacks the energy it needs. Lyrics are actually pretty good and I see what you're trying to go for with the flow it just sounds too forced. I used to have the same problem, you just gotta get comfy and let your natural voice out and it'll sound a lot better.

Other than that, I really liked the beat and your intro/outro suited it very well. Creepy feeling!

Keep it up man!
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Re: Tornado: Mental Asylum

Postby Tornado » Feb 10th, '11, 11:40

Cheers for the feed ya'll, appeciate it :worship:
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