Break Me Down

[Solace]

Quick random verse.

Stream/Download Link

LoF:
viewtopic.php?f=38&t=109251

[Lyrics]
It's just life and I'm living in a playground,
Dead trees and medleys of grey clouds, the rain shouts,
With the thunder cracking, lovely when I'm kicked in,
Slit in, you think it's really funny when it isn't,
Give me some more time because I need the space,
You can keep the change with your greedy hate
Your lunacy and cruelty, your shallow starts,
I'm done picking up the pieces of my shadows heart,
You think I hate you, well there was once a time,
Where you were just a girl and I was just another guy,
You think I hate you, well there was once a time,
Where I'd suffocate you with the fuckin' love of mine,
And it's funny because I saw a future with you, but,
We're not meant to be if the little things could rip through us,
It was more than a stab in the back,
She pulled the spine from my skeleton and snapped it in half.

[DƎRDYPK]

that was dopeeeeeeeee
I like the flow your kicking on that verse
I'm pretty sure you showed me this but did you redo some of this?
sounds pretty iLL dude
keep dropping

[Solace]

Yeah I did, thanks for noticing Good looks on peeping it

[_Steven_]

You had a good flow but it sounded uneven over the beat in the first half of the verse. I like the jazz feel to the beat. Better delivery. I like the overdubs. You're getting a lot better.

[Solace]

Thanks brah. Updated with new link, fixed up some of the levels I'd say.

[Jay Tunes]

i think the beat overshadowed you, specially since with that trumpet sound.. so turned it down a bit..
quickie, nothing big.
flow was ok, link your bars better tho... some where off beat.

[Solace]

Thanks for the feed dude

[B.A.D.]

you need to fix the volumes up a bit man, your vocals sound too low.
I love this beat, this is a different version though, Its actually better than the one I'm used to hearing, its a great sample to do.

you sir, you keep getting better, at the begging it seemed like it took you a couple seconds to catch the beat and get comfortable on it. none-the less it was real good. I see that you have actually been taking the feedback in account, I see you less monotone, with less desire to text to impress lol, its really good. And the emotion is more present now. I really really see extreme potential in you, so please keep doing music man, keep it building up. You have the voice and style for it.

On a side note, I'd like to do a collab with ya, I think I have a song that might fit you. Interested?

[Rekluse]

That was good man, like the endin lines the best makes me wanna hear how the rest would go..good flow and lyrics

[Mr. Chambers]

ok

your flow is still brand-new-ish....you still need lots of practice and you seem to slur/mumble words and it makes it hard to understand you. i do however like you as an artist. lots of raw emotion in your words, not so much in your style yet, but your vocab and the way you word shit has so much potential that once your get your style down, your going to be pretty fucking amazing, and i honestly only see you getting better with time, both lyrically and with your technique. my only suggestion is you practice more. even if its just reciting verse you don't like, find spots where your flow can be fixed up or where you feel it could be improved. i hear it all the time listening to my older songs where i'm more focused on making it sound good instead of it actually sounding good.

also try to work on going into more details, including little details or maybe even lil stories within your raps to help add more to each track. it'll help make it longer and it'll help you become a better mc at portraying your thoughts and emotions to your listeners threw words.

[gutawafang]

holy fuck. it's the JEZEBELLE beat!!! i love this beat. there's so many versions of it!!! xD

fucking nice lyrics. my cup of tea man. i felt it. i know you layered the emphasis track, but make it louder a bit... your voice louder just a little on the emphasis track. fucking good man.

[preest]

I like the topic of this track but I feel it lacked the pure emotion of a love track, I could kinda hear you reading it off the page rather than expressing yourself! I think apart from this you need to make a full track out of it, I could imagine a dope angry singing hook on it, the mixing could maybe a little better but overall I enjoyed it

[Solace]

Goddamn n.iggers feeding month old tracks...I'm playing but I have improved much much since this trash. I've read through all the feedback, I can't be arsed to go one by one but I've taken into account what I already haven't taken on my own though.

@Big ax-d, barely any time to record for collabs, maybe in the future but for now its all solo shit i guess