Lately I've been on some real low shit and this is just a quick glimpse into my mind right now. Let me know what you think, guys!
Razor To The Wrist: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=xtCgs9j6Qiw
Link Of Feedback: http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=38&t=109030&p=1540900#p1540900
Razor To The Wrist - WesT *16 Bars*
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Razor To The Wrist - WesT *16 Bars*
by WesTMusiK » Mar 5th, '11, 00:57
Emotions get the best of me, the thought of you stresses me
Love me and break me, that's the fuckin' recipe
So why do I miss you? I'm walking on these eggshells
Hoping for an answer and all I do is beg help - Ellustrate
Love me and break me, that's the fuckin' recipe
So why do I miss you? I'm walking on these eggshells
Hoping for an answer and all I do is beg help - Ellustrate
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Re: Razor To The Wrist - WesT *16 Bars*
by WesTMusiK » Mar 6th, '11, 17:56
Come on guys, give me some feedback! Haha. I know it's emo but still, hahaha.
Emotions get the best of me, the thought of you stresses me
Love me and break me, that's the fuckin' recipe
So why do I miss you? I'm walking on these eggshells
Hoping for an answer and all I do is beg help - Ellustrate
Love me and break me, that's the fuckin' recipe
So why do I miss you? I'm walking on these eggshells
Hoping for an answer and all I do is beg help - Ellustrate
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Re: Razor To The Wrist - WesT *16 Bars*
by Jaz » Mar 6th, '11, 20:16
Technically - 6/10
Hook: Not sure if this applies to a one verse track.
Concepts: Solid concept.. not too played out yet.. at least in rap.
Lyricism: Decent.. Not great, not bad.
Musically 7.1/10
Production: Like the beat, don't love it. You ride it well though.
Catchiness: Not really there.
Delivery/Flow: Solid flow.. Doesn't really fall off from what I hear. Your delivery fits the concept very well, and that is your strong point here I think.
OVERALL: 6.7/10 - Good shit.
Hook: Not sure if this applies to a one verse track.
Concepts: Solid concept.. not too played out yet.. at least in rap.
Lyricism: Decent.. Not great, not bad.
Musically 7.1/10
Production: Like the beat, don't love it. You ride it well though.
Catchiness: Not really there.
Delivery/Flow: Solid flow.. Doesn't really fall off from what I hear. Your delivery fits the concept very well, and that is your strong point here I think.
OVERALL: 6.7/10 - Good shit.
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Re: Razor To The Wrist - WesT *16 Bars*
by Jay Tunes » Mar 9th, '11, 03:18
your right, this is emo as hellllllllllllllllllll... but again, at least your being real and thas good 
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Re: Razor To The Wrist - WesT *16 Bars*
by Tranquil » Mar 13th, '11, 17:24
I thought i left feed for this 
Well this is a good 16 man. The lyrics are deep, ive been on some down shit lately aswell so i kinda know how you feel.
"You see a happy person who is perfectly fine, But I see a person who wants to purposely die" Those two lines are deep man. Head up brah, and keep making good music
Well this is a good 16 man. The lyrics are deep, ive been on some down shit lately aswell so i kinda know how you feel.
"You see a happy person who is perfectly fine, But I see a person who wants to purposely die" Those two lines are deep man. Head up brah, and keep making good music
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