dR3 - Spitfire

[dR3]

I just did this for Killa's 16 bars, and I wanted to see what you guys think.

Recorded with my phone's microphone, and it's my first recording in like 2 years (first one ever in English). Also, I don't have a rapper name because I'm not trying to be a rapper, so I decided to use m TR username. It was fun recording & mixing this.


I sound a bit like Canibus, but whatever lmao, here's the link:
http://hulkshare.com/72wiee8rvzua


Lyrics:
The one thing any other faggot rapper lacks
is everything, you know exactly what I'm laughing at
for God's sake, If I don't hear a decent battle track
I'll grab an axe and start taking heads, can you handle that?
I'll battle your whole crew, catch a beating from a vet
I'm sick and your not, don't you see my advantage cat?
I murder anyone, using the burning rage inside me
I'm passing all the rappers, leaving the human race behind me
you can rhyme against me, can't keep up with my pace and timing
lyrics are my greatest technique, the best way of fighting
so if we need a rhyme or two to help the battle start
I'll grab your heart with words strong enough to blow a man apart
I'm pulling your cards and all, until your arm is off
you gon' deepthroat my dick until you start to cough
then find your way home, and quickly get a clue
you can spit a thousand bars, yet no one's hearing you


Feedback link:
viewtopic.php?f=38&t=108595


Opinions and advices are welcome, you can be as critical as you want to, I don't mind, lol.

[Scrubz]

Maybe ou should try being a raper lol. Not bad, especially for a cellphone. rhymeswere basic but the flow was pretty damn good. And you do sound like cannabitch lol.

[Raids-God]

Edit : Works Now

I Always thought you were British,
Dope none the Less

[B.A.D.]

lol, u dont sound like canibus

ok. you really have a chance here man, your flow is really really good, and the style is damn nice man, dark shit. lol. lyrics are also above level.

I think you only need to improve on quality and delivery aspects. you sound a bit shy, and the mixing is all over the place. (althought kinda original tbqh).

I enjoyed and was pleasantly surprised

[Tranquil]

This beat is sick!

I wouldve guessed that this was recorded with a phone

Glad that you posted up the lyrics cause there were a couple of lines i didnt understand

This is pre good for your first English recorded song, and it being your first song recorded in two years, its solid

[dR3]

Thanks guys, appreciate the kind words.

[ThomasJ]

This was dope bro!

You were the last person I'd expect to drop a verse in Audio Stage. lol

Anyway, like everyone else already said, the lyrics were sick.
You could improve your flow a bit on some parts, but it's great overall.
Rap more ---> Improve delivery

I really want to hear more from you, get to work bruh!

[Sam.]

The choice of beat is awesome and the lyrics are up to the point.
I could feel a slight hesitation in your flow maybe it's due to the break from recording ,but hell it was ayt .
Really surprising is the way there is no trippin in between .
keep at it bra ,that's the feed i can give.

[dR3]

Thanks broskis.

[iain08]

I liked it! Where are you from? I always through you were English or something haha.

[Emadyville]

Damn, first of all, you sounded like kind of devilish with that voice haha but it worked, not sure if that had to do with quality, mixing, or something else but I didn't expect that at all

The flow was pretty good, very slow so simple, but it worked. The lyrics and rhymes were simple, but you again made it all work, the last line was a strong way to end it and a pretty dope line

Overall, I think you need to record more, and didn't sound like it was on a phone so if you got a mic I think it'd be the beginning of some great things...keep at it son

[NicoleEM]

I like it
Seriously tho,def needs a better quality,if it wasn't for the lyrics,i wouldn't have understand some of them.Flow and lyrics were nice,liked them.It felt like you were offbeat at times,but got back on it fast.Loved the beat

[Trimss]

The beat is fucking sick, and you have a deep voice. I like it. Lyrics aren't bad. You sound like a russian devillish soldier. It's cool though
Where are you from?

[Atone]

DUDE THIS IS FUCKIN SICK, the beat, your voice, everything, you need to make a mixtape, i'd definitly bump it

[dR3]

Thanks guys, means a lot!