"So long"

[Block]

I wrote this to "All for nothing" on shadowville.

Beat:
http://www.shadowville.com/1296/genres/ ... or-nothing


This song is different than anything I've done before. The parts in ( ) are actually opposing views, in the first verse. And they're direct arguing with the "girl" in the second verse. It's a concept I wanted to do for a while and finally found an awesome way to do it. I'm hoping it will work when I record it.



our days have turned to ashes but the phoenix never rose again..
(knowing him he's gone) ... (his songs are so emotionless)
with no intent to spark a feud I mention how your arms are blue
and black and they're discolored.. I tell you that I'm sorry too
(I know you didn't mean it and it's only just a part of you)
that part of me is wrong you know the rest of me is awful too
I offer you a refuge.. a place that you can get to..
(He planted all his seeds and now he's trying not to let you go)
I would let you go if you had needed me to say it
but the nest is really warm and it's a place for you to lay in..
a place for you to rest your head when every bed is cold and dark
I'll hold a spark just out of reach, (You know I'll never leave you)..
peeking through the looking glass to check if I can see you smile
I'll swollow all I can.. to know that I can keep you down
every little part of me is followed by a part of you,
when part of this is gone I guess that I will be departing too


I'mma take a ride on that old road
a highway to somewhere (my way to nowhere)
I'll tell you when I get there...
(I'mma take a ride)...
I'mma take a ride on this old road
a highway to somewhere,
I'll tell you when I get there but I'mma take a ride
(my way to nowhere)
I'mma take a ride, yeah I'mma take a ride
on this old road..
a highway to somewhere
(don't go).. why?


I'm packing all my pride into a bag (atleast what's left of it)
what's left of it is sediments of sentiments you never let exist
(you would never let me kiss you when you're angry),
the distance is amazing when it offers up a cure
for everything you thought was killing (you were never really sure)..
I am offering a purified glimpse at this disease through my eyes
(is it me)?.. of course it is I wouldn't ever lie to you,
and plus I would have fixed me if I needed to ((needed to))
I'm needing you to leave me now so I can finish packing up my bags
and this saddle on my back is getting heavier..
(I think you need to loosen up the rains)
who's to say that.. Proof is in the pain
and there is nothing you could payback,
Listen to the play back and tell me how I'm ignorant,
I'm sitting with a cigarette and I won't even finish it,
I don't wanna smoke it, I'mma use it for the warmth that's in the air
cos the coldness of your shoulder is more than I can bare..



I'mma take a ride on that old road
a highway to somewhere (my way to nowhere)
I'll tell you when I get there...
(I'mma take a ride)...
I'mma take a ride on this old road
a highway to somewhere,
I'll tell you when I get there but I'mma take a ride
(my way to nowhere)
I'mma take a ride,
yeah I'mma take a ride on this old road..
a highway to somewhere
(my way to nowhere)


I'mma take a ride on that old road
a highway to somewhere (my way to nowhere)
I'll tell you when I get there...
(I'mma take a ride)...
I'mma take a ride on this old road
a highway to somewhere,
I'll tell you when I get there but I'mma take a ride
(my way to nowhere)
I'mma take a ride,
yeah I'mma take a ride on this old road..
a highway to somewhere
(my way to nowhere)

Our days have turned to ashes..
I'm packing up my pride..
The phoenix never rose again..
I'mma take a ride..

Our days have turned to ashes..
I'm packing up my pride..
The phoenix never rose again..
I'mma take a ride..

I'm gone..





I fed sajjad's piece.

[BILI]

I love it man,I could definitely flow it to the beat,emotions are amazing and I love that hook.

This would be my fav part:

who's to say that.. Proof is in the pain
and there is nothing you could payback,
Listen to the play back and tell me how I'm ignorant,
I'm sitting with a cigarette and I won't even finish it,
I don't wanna smoke it, I'mma use it for the warmth that's in the air
cos the coldness of your shoulder is more than I can bare

[WakeUpShow]

it was really beautiful. i like the imagery and flow. they are just superb. I like the fact that you took the time to write a hook and even a bridge, and great ones at that. Keep it up, would love to hear this in audio.

[Block]

Hey, thanks guys. I appreciate it.

[Block]

Bump

[classthe_king]

I thought this was great, I flowed it perfectly and the rhyming sounded good. I related to it a lot too

[Just Silver]

Definitely a piece that surprised me usually i dont like reading songs but this was an exception

Extreme flow like everything was on point and the chorus was actually good (usually they aren't like 90 percent of the time)

10/10

[Block]

Thanks, man.. I really appreciate it.