Zombie field trip

[Yah-hah]

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Just kinda wrote up some craziness that was on my mind at 4 in the morning I guess. Tryin to work on my flow a lil bit just might be gettin some recording soon so ya know But yeah man no beat yet I'm workin on finding one.

When God brought his hand down to calm me,
I snatched that fuckers wrist and pulled him down with the zombies,
Like 'Why the fuck did you have to take my best friend',
Screamin 'Whats the lesson in talkin to dead men',
Walk with no presence just a dull body
Hearin voices, somethins wrong with my skull prolly,
Every string of consciousness grabs hold and pulls strongly,
Step down from my noose and use the rope to pull zombies,
From the grave so I can say 'Hey, have you met Jesus, son of God?'
But all they can think about is biting each one of my thumbs off,
So now I stand in a field full of tombstones,
Sayin Jesus it's nice to meet ya welcome to your new home,
Hell moved up a couple feet, Jail rules now you're stuck with me,
Fell through all so suddenly that male you hail true is nothing see,

I'm running through the fucking forest being chased by hungry corpses,
Everything that was important's replaced by cunning forces,
We take our bloody horses through gates on the stunning warships,
Late but unimportant to take all of the chords and erase wat was before it,
Rockin chairs on bloody porches, you locked me there, I fucking forfiet,
Yellin I love my dad but he's never here so I kinda find it funny yours is,
Like mine was unimportant shit why you gon' ignore it,
Fight until the shore's hit with the trash left by the tidals that come before it,
Rhyme's becomin borin, mindless dumb performance,
Like the I'm one that your with but twice of wat the score is,
Life becomes a chore then you die. end of story,
2 choices live it boring or die while you're preforming,
So Jesus answer me this, why the fuck are we lost here,
This place we chase has been hell ever since we got here,
But he couldnt speak we're too busy with this guys own problems,
Distracted to save me like oh God makin me knife those robbers,
Makin me fight stone goblins in ice cold lava
Sayin'Godammit this crown is killin me and the thorns are showin,
The longer you ignore the poet the faster both his horns'll grow in

[Xray]

Man that was dope. The flow on the first verse was vicious, and the rhymes felt real natural. Felt good reading your shit once again, been a while since I did, haha. All I can say is, the flow felt awkward at some parts in the second verse, so work on editing that for the beat and it's finito bruh.

Care to feedback?
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[Yah-hah]

Man that was dope. The flow on the first verse was vicious, and the rhymes felt real natural. Felt good reading your shit once again, been a while since I did, haha. All I can say is, the flow felt awkward at some parts in the second verse, so work on editing that for the beat and it's finito bruh.

Care to feedback?
viewtopic.php?f=24&t=109818

Thanks homie ya the flow at the end is a bit of a switch up guess you'll have to hear it. Appreciate the love

[Maybe]

The whole thing was super-enjoyable man. Point on flow/lyrics. I like the beginning the most, even the first few lines make you understand that this is going to be funny but dope.

Good piece man.

[Yah-hah]

The whole thing was super-enjoyable man. Point on flow/lyrics. I like the beginning the most, even the first few lines make you understand that this is going to be funny but dope.

Good piece man.

Thanks old friend. Yeah I've had the whole pull that fucker down with the zombies line for at least a year just never put it anywhere, I prettty much just wrote the whole thing based off that line. I try to write with a very satyrical style I guess I like to over exagurrate things or put it all very ironically. thanks for checkin

[Maybe]

The whole thing was super-enjoyable man. Point on flow/lyrics. I like the beginning the most, even the first few lines make you understand that this is going to be funny but dope.

Good piece man.

Thanks old friend. Yeah I've had the whole pull that fucker down with the zombies line for at least a year just never put it anywhere, I prettty much just wrote the whole thing based off that line. I try to write with a very satyrical style I guess I like to over exagurrate things or put it all very ironically. thanks for checkin

Came off beautifully, and no problem man.

[Block]

From the grave so I can say 'Hey, have you met Jesus, son of God?'
But all they can think about is biting each one of my thumbs off,

Lmao. I laughed at a few parts throughout this. This was a well written piece that flowed surprisingly well. I enjoyed the 'story'. It's nice seeing you back, dude. You should write more often, we don't have much activity at all in this section anymore.

[Yah-hah]

Yeah man I'm tryin to, just mad busy lol with the 60 hour a week job and a baby on the way lol any spare time is used for sleeping lol Butr appreciate it man Ill try to get some more things posted

[Fa-Q]

interesting flow and concept, great piece, Just. Glad you're still posting a lot man.

[nickolas_warner]

That was really great. An awesome fresh idea. I really liked the flow. Rhyming in the second verse was fantastic.

[Yah-hah]

Appreciate it Nick and Myth, It's hard to come up with fresh, untapped, not ridiculously played out material sometimes

[Yah-hah]

Bumpin

[gutawafang]

Lmao. I read it once. Just read it again. Shit man!!! That's sick!!! The first two lines already got me hooked! Hahahahahaha. Sick punches man. Never disappointing Yahah piece, as usual.

[Yah-hah]

Ha thanks guta, yeah I've had the 1st two lines for a very long time just never had a place to put them