Say G'night [first verse]

[Xray]

Beat: http://www.usershare.net/pnzfij0clmvr/march

Step on my door mat, welcome to this black hole
But are you sure that, you really wanna back fall?
Cause we can track foes, and we can drag souls
To the center of the magma where we trap those
When you enter, remember there's no agenda
to what can hinder your mender, you walk as casual as usual
There's no defender, no surrender, cause it has you
And they will gas you, if you don't follow through
You know what that do? You're there in solo roots
You're under hollow rules, everything burns through you
So either learn to crawl, or they will burn you all
So learn to show your privilege, and murder all your siblings
And then you wonder how I reigned upon this purpose
How I framed all these corpses on my walls for the atrocious
I barely had any choices, I was glad they showed me torment
Cause I'm tearing every moment of mourning, it's way too late now

LOF: McMaybe/K Block/mcZu

[B.A.D.]

doesnt really flows when I read it, but I'm sure it does in some way lol, please record this shit so I can fully enjoy it

[Block]

To be honest bro, things seem scattered in this piece. it kinda feels like you wanted to tell a story but were hesitating with it and it showed through your writing.

The structure and rhymes were great. a lot of the lines were also great, they just didn't seem to fit together as smoothly as most of your other stuff.

[Maybe]

The idea is excellent. I like where you were going with this, and your rhymes here are unique, and much more experimental than your other stuff (which is great). I don't really understand what you were doing, but that's because it needs a second verse. The flow was great, and I can see where you speed up/slow down.

Overall, great job man.