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WesT - Yonkers Remix *NEW*

Postby WesTMusiK » Mar 24th, '11, 03:44

Check out the remix I did of Tyler, The Creator's song "Yonkers". Let me know what you think, guys!

Yonkers Remix: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iAS6mJB0py8

Link Of Feedback: http://www.forum.trshady.com/viewtopic.php?f=38&t=110115&p=1561713#p1561713

Lyrics:

I'm a fuckin' walking paradox
No I'm not, I'm clean but I always fuckin' swear alot
I'm not weird, just out of the ordinary
I like to be alone alot, yeah, the more the merry

I'm always talking to myself
I've tried everything but therapists won't help
They always say that I'm something called "Two-Faced"
But fuck what they say, they don't know me, do they?

Fuck living, but, I don't wanna die
And if I do then I'll take my own life ... Bitch

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Wrist drippin' let the blood hit the bucket
And when it fills up, pour it on me cause I love it
I'm not crazy, it's just no one understands me
Not my friends, teachers, even my own family

You see they think that I'm possessed
'Cause I talk in the mirror with some make-up and a dress
But all I'm doing is I'm living out my fantasy
Of meeting a sane women with class, can't you see?

I'm too old for my friends to be imaginary
Is what they all say but obviously they haven't met larry
I mean hes loyal and he never thinks of dissin' me
And when he gets drunk, he always shares the listerine

People judge and say "Oh, this kids prob'ly gay"
Just because I dance around my house wearin' lingerie
Oh, and I know for a fact
That Wayne, Drake and Nicki can kiss my fuckin' ass

Wayne can fuck Drake in the ass 'till he brakes his hips
And Ill rape Nicki Minaj as Im tapin' it
And then I'll throw it in the bin with the others
And watch them all later as I jack off under covers

I'm not insane, I'll tell you all again
When Im lookin around the house, Im playing hide and seek with my friends
You say I can't find them 'cause they're all invisible
No they're not, they're good at hiding, that part of the game's pivotal

I'm perfectly sane, now if you don't mind
I need to put on maskara while I go cry
Emotions get the best of me, the thought of you stresses me
Love me and break me, that's the fuckin' recipe
So why do I miss you? I'm walking on these eggshells
Hoping for an answer and all I do is beg help
- Ellustrate
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Re: WesT - Yonkers Remix *NEW*

Postby Tash8 » Mar 24th, '11, 03:56

Haha that was humorous. Your flow was a lil shakey but it was listenable. lyrics were ok, they were funny but weird and random. I'm not sure what's up with the young money orgy that's going on but whatever :confusion: lol good shit man, keep it up. weird beat choice
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Re: WesT - Yonkers Remix *NEW*

Postby WesTMusiK » Mar 24th, '11, 04:31

Tash8 wrote:Haha that was humorous. Your flow was a lil shakey but it was listenable. lyrics were ok, they were funny but weird and random. I'm not sure what's up with the young money orgy that's going on but whatever :confusion: lol good shit man, keep it up. weird beat choice


Hahaha, yeah. The shakey flow was a part of the whole weird/random/creepy thing I was going for.

And for the Young Money thing ... I hate them, that was me saying Wayne and Drake are gay and I want to rape Nicki Minaj and tape it so I can watch it later. (Not in a literal sense, just expressing my hate of them, haha)

But thanks for the feedback, homie! It was well appreciated!
Emotions get the best of me, the thought of you stresses me
Love me and break me, that's the fuckin' recipe
So why do I miss you? I'm walking on these eggshells
Hoping for an answer and all I do is beg help
- Ellustrate
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Re: WesT - Yonkers Remix *NEW*

Postby B.A.D. » Mar 24th, '11, 06:10

damn I love the original song. one of my favs from Tyler. excelent beat choice.

flow was a bit shaky gotta say. I think your emotion got in the way of smoothness on this song, see how on the original tyler keeps it on a smooth level un-conditionally from the song itself, even with the amount of emotion you have to keep it cool.

I love your lyrics, very well written and schemed. Everything is perfect except your voice (thats just a matter of opinion I guess). And the way you tone words and use guide as for the flow its not to original to put it that way... maybe you could have added your own twist u know?...

anyways, good job, specially on the writting. :worship:

I'd like to spit a freestyle to this, can I get the instrumental man, please? :y:
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Re: WesT - Yonkers Remix *NEW*

Postby Block » Mar 24th, '11, 10:13

I laughed at the hiding seek line. Good shit. Your voice reminds me a lot of steve's, lol.
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Re: WesT - Yonkers Remix *NEW*

Postby WesTMusiK » Mar 24th, '11, 15:09

Big Ax-D wrote:damn I love the original song. one of my favs from Tyler. excelent beat choice.

flow was a bit shaky gotta say. I think your emotion got in the way of smoothness on this song, see how on the original tyler keeps it on a smooth level un-conditionally from the song itself, even with the amount of emotion you have to keep it cool.

I love your lyrics, very well written and schemed. Everything is perfect except your voice (thats just a matter of opinion I guess). And the way you tone words and use guide as for the flow its not to original to put it that way... maybe you could have added your own twist u know?...

anyways, good job, specially on the writting. :worship:

I'd like to spit a freestyle to this, can I get the instrumental man, please? :y:


Thanks for the feed, homie! And for sure you can have it. Just send your email in a pm and I'll send it ASAP.

Thanks for the feedback, everyone! Keep it comin'!
Emotions get the best of me, the thought of you stresses me
Love me and break me, that's the fuckin' recipe
So why do I miss you? I'm walking on these eggshells
Hoping for an answer and all I do is beg help
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Re: WesT - Yonkers Remix *NEW*

Postby Jay Tunes » Mar 24th, '11, 21:57

man everybody jumping on the OFWFKTA or w.e. wagon..(no hate) but im just not feeling them just yet lmao


flow - was there, kinda.. but there was something missing idk what tho.. i cant explain it... maybe ur voice idk.
lyrics - some funny ass shit, but well thought lyrics
other - i wouldnt jump on this type of beat but u did just fine...


YM still making money and getting bitties hehe, no beef tho.. that part was well thought
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