The best thing about Beautiful (& Deja Vu)

[classthe_king]

I seem to gravitate to the bottle of NyQuil then I salivate.
Start off with the NyQuil like 'I think I'll just have a taste'.
Couple of sips of that then I gradually graduate,
to a harder prescription drug called Valium like yeah that's great.
I go to take just one and I end up like having eight.
Now I need something in my stomach cuz I haven't ate.
Maybe I'll grab a plate of nachos and I'll have a steak.
And you'd think that with all I have at stake,

Forced as fuck

Maybe just a nice cold brew, what's a beer?
That's the devil in my ear I been sober a fuckin' year.
And that fucker still talks to me, he's all I can fuckin hear,
'Marshall come on we'll watch the game it's the Cowboys and Buccaneers'.

Most forced lines in the whole song

But I never had no problem with alcohol.
Ouch look out for the wall aim for the couch I'm about to fall.
I missed the couch and down I go looking like a bouncing ball.
Shit must have knocked me out cuz I didn't feel the ground at all
Wow what the fuck happened last night? Where am I?
Man, fuck am I hungover, and god damn i got a head ache.
Shit half a vicodin why cant I?
'All systems ready for take off please stand by'.

That's also forced

Now here I am three months later, full blown relapse,
'Just get high until the kids get home from school holmes, relax'.
And since im convinced that I'm insomniac,
I need these pills to be able to sleep, so I take three naps,
just to be able to function throughout the day let's see
that's an Ambien each nap, how many Valium? Three.
And that will average out to about one good hours sleep.
Ok so now you see the reason how come he
has taken four years just too put out an album B.
See me and you we almost had the same outcome Heath,
cuz that Christmas you know the Pneumonia thing?
It was bologna, was it the Methadone ya think?
Or the Hydrocodone, you hide inside your pornos?
Your VCR tape cases with your Ambien CR, great places to hide ain't it?
So you can lie to Haley, I'm going beddy bye Whitney baby good night Elaina.

That whole part was forced except the heath part

[Satire]

Did you listen to Sentus' new song Subliminal Thoughts? I think it almost competes with Deja Vu IMO TBH YAH.

[classthe_king]

Well you can force any reasoning you want and invent any excuses for the rhymes but it doesn't take away from the fact that they're still forced.

[Satire]

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[Block]

Nope. I think Class is good (he's better than Block), but he's not fuckin' with Eminem's best songs.

Well you can force any reasoning you want and invent any excuses for the rhymes but it doesn't take away from the fact that they're still forced.

You've got nothing. Another failed attempt at criticizing Deja Vu. You could just come out and say you don't like his delivery or something... but there's nothing about the writing you can criticize.

Terrible logic, considering the fact I taught class a lot of what he knows.

This try-hard is angry as shit, haha. Just face facts: you're not good. Even attempting to say otherwise is laughable at best. And the biggest difference is that I can flow. I'm actually a rapper. I get on stage. You write half-assed text with no flow and very little meaning.. Without a beat. Don't ever try to compare your hobby to my art.

"i had internal multies all over!!!"

[WakeUpShow]

i haven't read the whole argument, and you're a phenomenal writer Block, but saying Amadeo is a bad writer is asinine.

[Block]

I already said I'm not very good. But nice attempt at steering the conversation/discussion towards a me vs. you scenario when it comes to writing.

I don't care if you think you're better than me. I don't care if you think my writing sucks. As far as I'm concerned, I'm dealing with the guy who thinks there's such a thing as a hard "e" sound. I'm dealing with a guy who can't spell basic words like "pursuing." I'm dealing with the guy who thinks Deja Vu is "sub-par."

But you know, if you really want to attack my writing, I can dish it back. Attacking your writing would be a cheap shot, but you don't seem to want to argue about how Deja Vu > your life, anymore.

I write better than deja vu. My rhyme schemes are more complex than deja vu and I tell better stories.

You're mad as hell. Deja vu is a sub par song to anyone who isn't obsessed with eminem. what's your point?

Where has your writing and correct grammar gotten you? In your mother's house on trshady arguing for your forum dominance. My writing? An independent record contract, numerous shows and more pussy than you've ever encountered. Need I say more?

Stepyourlifegameup. When it comes to me and you, there is little comparison. I've done the things you dream about.

[iain08]

It seems that every time Amadeo or Block correct each other on their spelling, they make a spelling mistake themselves.

I might have. Point out my spelling errors, thanks.

Oh I guess meant grammar errors, but I was just saying how pointless it is when arguments come down to the use of a semicolon.

[Block]

It seems that every time Amadeo or Block correct each other on their spelling, they make a spelling mistake themselves.

I might have. Point out my spelling errors, thanks.

Oh I guess meant grammar errors, but I was just saying how pointless it is when arguments come down to the use of a semicolon.

Fucking thank you. That's all this dumb ass can argue about.

[BigBangBazinga]

Master Chief went from one of the best trolls to one of the worst

[Master Chief]

Master Chief went from one of the best trolls to one of the worst

I'm one of the best trolls this site has

Everyone except you and a few smart, non-retarded people believe me. Anyways, as of now I'm gonna give up on my trolls because of undisclosed reasons.

[Block]

And Block, writing/correct grammar usually does get you places.

Where has your writing and correct grammar gotten you? In your mother's house on trshady arguing for your forum dominance. My writing? An independent record contract, numerous shows and more pussy than you've ever encountered. Need I say more?

Where has it gotten you? Exactly where I pinpointed.

And yet another reading comprehension is needed. Your writing; as in your failure-of-a-text drops.

Where have they gotten you, that you're able to even attempt to compare yourself to me? You can't even write to a beat. And don't tell me that you do, because your line are way too choppy to be written to anything with measure.


Again, I'll stress that I wasn't initially picking out anyone's grammar. You do that shit; not me. I was mentioning the fact the kid didn't see the "?" in my post. I don't need to pick out feeble shit like grammatical errors and spelling mistakes in order to debate with someone. I actually make points. You fail to do that so you take the road of any internet-superstar and open up dictionary.com.

Then when it comes to being between you and I, you find a way to weasel out of it like the bitch you are. You'll never be on my level anywhere in life. Ever.

[Block]

"to a place"
^^^ So where has it gotten you, Amadeo? Nowhere. You're nothing in life. What exactly are you doing with life right now?

And desperate? Hardly. Picking out grammatical errors and spelling mistakes is desperation. You made this about my writing, so let's make it about yours, as well.

I told you that your writing has a very choppy stop and go flow, lacks imagery / content and has amazingly basic rhyme patterns. What else do I have to say? There's not "trying to rip" your writing. I don't have to try. You're an amateur.

What have you pointed out other than grammatical errors? Time's ticking... I'd like to hear this. And opinions don't count. Solid facts do. So? I'm not the only person on this forum who believes I've written a song better than deja vu--And that's not trolling.

And those 3? No. I wouldn't even begin to compare myself to Em's old work. Songs like White America, Cleaning Out My Closet, Lose Yourself, Sing For The Moment; Those are hip hop excellence. I strive to write that well. But Deja vu? Nah, sorry. I'm better than that.


So, Again I'll ask: Where has this correct grammar-nazi bullshit gotten you? From what I've seen, you spend most of your days on TRshady.com.. I've already explained where my writing and performing has gotten me (for proof you can check the thread I made about getting a contract or ask Mcmaybe and other people in the community about me performing)... What about you?

If you're going to compare dick sizes, atleast have an inch or two. Grammatical errors don't mean shit in everyday society.

[EminemInsider]

Pretty sure he raved about Deja Vu in another thread just a week or two ago.

He doesn't even know whether he's trolling or not anymore. Self-induced mental illness...

[Block]

Pretty sure he raved about Deja Vu in another thread just a week or two ago.

He doesn't even know whether he's trolling or not anymore. Self-induced mental illness...

You're referring to this thread.

Deja Vu is a great song but it lacks the passion

No one is arguing that Deju Vu isn't a great song. A song doesn't have to be technical to be good. I'm arguing that the technicalities of the song are not that technical. His rhyme pattern is simple.

Also, there was no 'raving' One simple mention of the song. And don't say "I'm pretty sure he..." When you know damn well you've been searching my posts for the past 3 days.