MCSam wrote::y: f9
What?
Pain (Personal Piece)
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Re: Pain (Personal Piece)
by Sam. » Apr 19th, '11, 18:53
MCSam wrote:MikeNUFC wrote:MCSam wrote:for eg: -
depressed
dressed
the multis you did outweighed them tho.
say I'm depressed
wake and get dressed
say/wake
pressed/dressed
The unstressed syllables don't need to rhyme.
f9
f9 ----. fine
by that i meant i got my points cleared.
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Re: Pain (Personal Piece)
by Manly Moose » Apr 20th, '11, 05:49
Great verse, flows right off the paper into my mind, I wanna hear this with a beat
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Re: Pain (Personal Piece)
by jackychan » Apr 22nd, '11, 03:10
I can only agree with the posts above. but the emotion is definatly there. ryhming was great too, but seemed off/forced in a few spots. Keep working on this piece. It's Great.- jackychan
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