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Postby Ivy » Apr 26th, '06, 22:44

BTW, when it mentions Ghetto, it rhymed and I thought it would relate with some slight adjustments. I have no relationship to the ghetto, so I won't play like I have. Just wanted to set the record straight on that issue before someone comments on it :flower:

These days you'll soemn - find parents who are qualified
Too blinded by the dollar-signs to help their kids fall-in-line
That's why these Columbine kids won't apologize
Unloading all-their-nine into the coumn-of-your-spine
We heard the motto-of-acknowledgement-from-politics
We watched these Colorado-kids-swallow-hollow-tips
We watched the cops behind thier cars hiding-from-the-killing
While teachers went inside-the-building trying to find-the-children
I guess it's easier for the news to blame-the-nuisance
On a game claiming-that-the music was the main-influence
Dark-thoughts-that-they're learning-from-older-kids
Spark-shots-as-the-murder-explodes-and-Rips
To mark-spots-using-burners-with-scopes-equipped
In the parking-lots-wehre-they're-turning-and-loading-clips
The cops-said-two-kids shot-at-the-students
Possible-influenced and lost-in-the-music
Cause'n-a-neusaince they laid-em-in-their-tomb
Brain washed from Playing-Doom and stayin'-in-their-room
They came home beaten up, their parents-didn't-care
They had their carrots-living-fair pluse some arrogance-to-spare
Now the terror's-in-the-air, we bought-a lot-of-coffins
They got-the-shottys-poppin', and shot-the-bodies-dropping
The slaughters-often-stop when the officers-and-cops-arrive
Cautious-to-survive, a lot of hostages-lost-their-lives
Back then the violence was gulliver-then-now
The bully's-made-em'-bow like they're hollier-then-thou
If they only-would-allow you to go-about-your-business
On the slower-route-of-distance all alone-without-assistance
Then thw whole-amount-of-interest of lunch-money-paid
WOuld make is so some-sunny-day, they're gonna wanna-run-away
Pull another-gun-and-spray, re-load-the-ammo
We hold-the-plan-so, keep-low-from-vandals
Some people-can't-handle when they make-it-bout'-the-name-calls
Creeping-like-commandos, breaking-out-the-chainsaws
Nah that'd be too hard to handle-with-packing-the-gas
I stand-in-the-back-of-the-calss with plans-for-attacking-your-ass
You thought-it-was-goin'-well, they shot-with-a-bullet-shell
They brought-during-show-and-tell, it's hot-when-you-go-to-hell
The dot-on-your-skulpin-gel indicates-your-fate
Cause once you instigate, some ones bound to imitate-your-hate
It's big news clapping columbine with a beretta
But the same things happens all the time up in the ghetto
We consider it chilling seeing incidents building
In the infinite killing of our innocent children
Can their music-or-favorite-song froce a crew's-aimer-drawn?
Their only question was who-do-we-blame-it-on?
So bullies, don't attempt to make a slave-for-your-hell
There ain't no saved-by-the-bell once you're engraved-with-a-shell


Me and a friend did a project on columbine for English, we had to write an essay about the events and conspiracies and all that. And we had to present a poster and our opinions and all that to the class, so I sat back, thought hard and long, and came up with this. This was written a while ago, when I had more intellect and spirits and motivation. I've posted this on many other forums under different user names throughout a couple years. I had to decide what name would stick and shit, and finally this one was concockted as you can tell. But anyways, hope you enjoyed. What's your opinions and comments?
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Postby AspirinE » Apr 26th, '06, 23:01

Woaaaa, that was mad nice :worship:
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Postby Ivy » Apr 26th, '06, 23:04

g_killa wrote:We heard the motto-of-acknowledgement-from-politics
We watched these Colorado-kids-swallow-hollow-tips

i like that bit most twas good :D


Thanks, I preferred the last two lines though... :toocool:

AsprinE wrote:Woaaaa, that was mad nice :worship:


:oops: Thanks, I try my best :blinking:
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Postby ThomasAguanis » Apr 26th, '06, 23:54

dammmmmmnnn
that was crazy
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Postby $0 R3@L » Apr 26th, '06, 23:57

very tight :worship:

i was gonna say too many multi's but is that even possible if it sounds good :confusion: :worship: :flower:
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Postby Ivy » Apr 26th, '06, 23:57

ThomasAguanis wrote:dammmmmmnnn
that was crazy
:worship:



:oops: Thanks, I try my very best when I write to touch people and make them look in "aw"... :oops:
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Postby Ivy » Apr 26th, '06, 23:58

$0 R3@L wrote:very tight :worship:

i was gonna say too many multi's but is that even possible if it sounds good :confusion: :worship: :flower:


I'm not sure, I'm not that type of artist. All I do is write from the heart, and try my best to impress people. :flower: Thanks for the comments everybody, it seems like only the mc's are replying :p
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Postby $0 R3@L » Apr 27th, '06, 00:03

you gonna record \:D/ ...you know where that p.m button is :happy: ...but seriously i felt your words as a mc but more importantly as a person.great stuff you blew half the ppl on ere who call em self rappers out the water. :worship: :flower:
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Postby Ivy » Apr 27th, '06, 00:05

$0 R3@L wrote:you gonna record \:D/ ...you know where that p.m button is :happy: ...but seriously i felt your words as a mc but more importantly as a person.great stuff you blew half the ppl on ere who call em self rappers out the water. :worship: :flower:


Thanks, no I don't record. I write and let others record. I like to see if they feel it and have the same flow and vibe as I do. One time I wrote something and about 3 different people did audios and all sounded differently, it was really kool :toocool:
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Postby Ivy » Apr 27th, '06, 00:10

Sarah wrote:Wow! :shocked2: That was so good Taylor, really. I loved it, excellent work!! ;) You should write more, you're very talented


Thanks. I figured I'm posting a lot of my shit lately, so I'd post more. I think I have a few others somewhere I might not have posted. I'll have to check on that though... :unsure:
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Postby Ivy » Apr 27th, '06, 00:19

Yes, I still write, I've written a few things lately, not much though... :flower:
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Postby Ivy » Apr 27th, '06, 00:33

Sarah wrote:I only started writing not long ago, so I'm not too good :sweating:


If there's one thing I've learned, never under estimate your talent. Your true talent begins to shine, when only you believe that you got some little spark that makes a fire burn bright and hot :toocool: (Like my little metaphor?) :toocool:
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Postby Ivy » Apr 27th, '06, 00:38

Sarah wrote:Lol, yes I do. And you're right there. I think I can improve though, just gotta keep writing and shit :sweating:


I hate this saying, but the more you practice, the better you get :zipped:
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Postby Ivy » Apr 27th, '06, 00:41

I'm about to post some of my newer work, I haven't written in a while, so I'm a little lousy right now... :p
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