SCRUBZ - Rebound(single off of new ep)

[Scrubz]

So here is what will eventual be my first single off of my upcoming ep, "Rebound". I have new mixing techniques since my last tape so this is kinda a test run to see what yall think. This track isnt fully mastered yet and the intro and outro was done in one take, off the top of my head. but other than that the verses and hook are what it will be when my ep drops.

Please give opinions and feedback, I always do the same .



LYRICS:

(VERSE1)
I got knocked down but im gettin back up
I act up just because i got no back up
you faggots laugh now yeah yo gone crack up
Acting like you that tough, still u getin smacked up
well guess what i had enough got my own dirt
Ive burry skelotens till my fuckin bones hurt
and whats worse it got me lookin for the helpin hand
When i know i needa go an stand and be a fuckin man
that be the plan and man no one'll stop me
you call cock-y, i call it confidence
from now on i'll take a foot and only give an inch
never takin shit and i call it my deliverence
it makin perfect sence, hommie it be clear as day
No matter what you say Im never gonna go and lay
grey skys? so they say I think it sooths me
ive hit the ground runnin try your hardest not to loose me cuz..

(HOOK)x2
You, can, knock, me, down,
but you aint gone knock me outtttt...
Past is the past, the present is my future...

(VERSE2)
Im not you door matt you fuckers better step off
livin like you wanna get your fukin block knocked off
ill knock your socks off anybody pop off
make ya ass' run like-im like-im fuckin hot sauce
ther not a danm cost not a need for cabbage
cats claimin 9 lives, you only average one
im not your average son, i be savage one
and pay backs a bitc hyou bouta have it come
dont know how but some, fall down they done
its liek they hit a bump and BOOM in the towel comes
i aint around these ones and man these clowns they dumb
and anyone affiliated damn right they shuned
you lookin like you stunned, you definitely dazed
your eyes are glazed man you blazed? let me paraphraze
I wont be phased when the road gets rougher
cuz the tough be the ones to get tougher

(HOOK)x2
You, can, knock, me, down,
but you aint gone knock me outtttt...
Past is the past, the present is my future...

(VERSE3)
i keep my chin down technically sound
you run around im aboutta box you in to the ground
im talkin, 6 feet scattered flowers surround
ya family circles around you fuckin burial ground
and revernge is why i did it dont you get it
its a fuckin metaphore when i spit it i admit
dont forget it , cuz il only say it once im commited
to get rid of every demon pay em back
twice as fast betchya ass they won't pass
Imma get em every boss, every piece of shit
every single hater record lable meage board debater
every traitor thats ends not havin my back
its time they growup act, magically grow a nut sack
im back, thats right im back its just me and my hit list
make sure all yall can whiteness em beg for my forgivness
-but before i go and get down to the business
if some how i get knock down il get up with some vengence

(HOOK)x2
You, can, knock, me, down,
but you aint gone knock me outtttt...
Past is the past, the present is my future...

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[classthe_king]

I don't have much feed other than lyrically it was pretty good, but I didn't buy the delivery. It's hard to pump up someone with a song when you're not pumped up yourself.

[BumShiv]

lyrically is was good but you need to get more pumped when recording a song like this. Put more emphasis on certain words to make the song more powerful. Liked the beat Overall, I enjoyed it

Please feed this

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[Scrubz]

ehh you guys can have you opinion and what not but I believe im as pumped as i need to be. MY delivery has always been smooth rather thank loud and energized, and maybe i need to try and be more versatile with it but I felt it fit for this song. but to each his own.

Thank you for the feed and taking out the time to listen, i really appreciate it.

[Block]

ehh you guys can have you opinion and what not but I believe im as pumped as i need to be. MY delivery has always been smooth rather thank loud and energized, and maybe i need to try and be more versatile with it but I felt it fit for this song. but to each his own.

Thank you for the feed and taking out the time to listen, i really appreciate it.

What's the point of posting a song up here, looking for criticism, if you are just going to shoot down the criticism given?

The mood of the lyrics in this song call for a more drastic approach than what you have supplied. It sounds almost as if you're whispering... You show little to no emotion at all--that has nothing to do with a smooth delivery.

I agree with what Class and the others have said: You need to work on the emotion in your songs. OR at least portraying the correct emotion in correlation to what the lyrics are telling us. Honestly, you sound the same on every song I've listened to. Granted, I've only listened to like 5.. still.. There should be a difference in emotion.

[Scrubz]

I encourage feed but if I disagree I'm going to say it. I wouldn't say I was shooting it down, I just disagree. Didn't mean to sound like that.

[Tranquil]

I love the beat man! I thought the beat woulda been some really hard shit but this was smooth and it worked. I liked your delivery, you approached it a different way that i thought you would, i thought you woulda had a angry delivery but you came in with that smooth Scrubz shit, love it! The hook is fucking great and the verses are fire! Good song, ill be looking out for that EP

[B.A.D.]

the beat is dope man, good work

overall, this was a pretti good fucking song. I'm actually gonna have one very similar to this on my upcoming album. But yeah, there's really not much feedback I can give you here cuz overall its a pretti good song. Your flow is perfect, the lyrics are dope. I do think your voice might be a little too soft for this type of song, but well, I think it works. The only I could tell you to improve is the hook probably, its weird, I didnt really understood it. I like how it sounds tho.

great work. just work on your emotion and delivery, you sound a bit too quiet, very whispery.

but yup... good one

[Scrubz]

Good looks ax! I wanna get down with them new millennium dream boys!!!

[Alex2012]

Dope beat, I really like it, your voice is very good here.

I liked the hook, just maybe your voice on this line [but you aint gone knock me outtttt...] should have been different.

I also liked lyrics.

[JBM]

This is dope man.
Hook is only thing that could of been a bit better but it's still good.

[Maybe]

First, the bad:

I didn't care for your emotion on this song. It wasn't bad, it just didn't fit the lyrics as much as it should have. The flow had a few hiccups, although nothing too distracting, and I wouldn't have put as many obvious multies in the first verse (this isn't so much a bad, just personal taste). My main dislike is your delivery. It's not bad either, as you clearly ride the beat properly, it's just empty feeling.

Now, the good:

Your flow was surprisingly smooth, and your lyrics were much better than expected. I actually like how you flow here more so than any other track I've heard from you, and even though I avoid obvious multies, they sound good as you emphasize them.

Good track overall, and make sure to hit me up when you drop the EP (I'm not on much other than to fix something on the board or check PMs)

[Instant Legend]

really dig this track! hook is dope as all hell, beautiful production - this shit is fire my dude!

[Scrubz]

Thank you all!

Explicit: Good looks man, im glad you did it. Also i can hook you up with a beat or 2 for ur up coming tape. pm me.
Cream: I produce everything I spit on. Thanks for the feed and i know what your saying, much appreciated.
Doom: Yeah i never wanted it to be a pump up type song, more motivational. Thank you for your late night rambles, haha.
Alex2012: Thanks for checkin me out , hope you peep my other stuff.
JBM: Good looks hommie .
MAybe: good shit man, glad you enjoyed it. I will deff pm you when i drop it. Thanks for peakin
InstantLegend: thanks for the good word man, means alot and glad u liked it.

[Phantom]

love the beat. always wanted to use a beat like this with an atmosphere like this, the beat is just beautiful bro. i like your presence on the track. i like the lyrics and flow a lot, quality sounds good. liked the "my deliverance" line and rhyme scheme. hook is catchy, id like to hear some more harmonies from you on it. i think it has a good motivational feel to it. i like this a lot man. good work