Connecting Through A Screen

[Ivy]

Anna is the one who inspired me to write this since her response in one of my threads. So yeah Anna Comments as usual are welcome

I'm sitting here so silently,
And restless in my chair
Pouring my heart through this screen
To make others aware

To show them what it's like inside
A heart as dark as mine
While wrapping words around my throat,
And choking, line by line

These words are more than letters;
The sum is greater than the parts
The meaning that's inside
Is one that touches many hearts

And when these thoughts invade a mind
My soul and theirs connect
And if you choose to look inside
You'll see we both reflect

You're reading this right now
I'm sure you know now what I mean
It's really not half-bad, you know,
Connecting through this screen

[Infliction]

very nice

[Ivy]

Thanks you guys. I actually like the best part the most Sarah

[> Evil _ MoNkEy <]

Anna is the one who inspired me to write this since her response in one of my threads. So yeah Anna Comments as usual are welcome

I'm sitting here so silently,
And restless in my chair
Pouring my heart through this screen
To make others aware

To show them what it's like inside
A heart as dark as mine
While wrapping words around my throat,
And choking, line by line

These words are more than letters;
The sum is greater than the parts
The meaning that's inside
Is one that touches many hearts

And when these thoughts invade a mind
My soul and theirs connect
And if you choose to look inside
You'll see we both reflect

You're reading this right now
I'm sure you know now what I mean
It's really not half-bad, you know,
Connecting through this screen

dizam im good im TiGGis muse

im sorry for the late response... i kept lookin at this thread, and im like... i should really read it... and i finally did... so um... ya./... sorry.... shoulda dun it sooner.

u have a gift. it gave me chills.... and u r very right:

And when these thoughts invade a mind
My soul and theirs connect
And if you choose to look inside
You'll see we both reflect

ur work does do that... with each peice u put a little of urself into it, bonding u with ur reader thro spiit..... its a very rare and genuine gift that most writers these days dont have...... u delivered it so beautifully, and really pulled the reader in with u...... to be able to leave such a mark on sumone with so little words is truely porteying skill....... u have a gift.... and i mean that... do not stop writing....

To show them what it's like inside
A heart as dark as mine
While wrapping words around my throat,
And choking, line by line

^^^ thats my favorite part of the peice..... and it has left me inspired. i can relate to every word of that....... i mean, the way u paint the picture with ur words... i can see someone sitting at there computer, getting a lump in there throat and crying as they pour there heart out, each word slowly burning inside.... choking them..... and a heart as dark as mine..... i mean... its just.... the way u put the stansa together... beautiful. it left me speechless


wow... thats all i can say

[Ivy]

Anna, that left me truly inspired. Every response you leave is like a paragraph long and it truly keeps me striving to write more and more. I'm speechless after reading it, and that's saying something. You got the concept out of the poem that I hoped everyone would recieve, and you explained it word for word. That's truly inspiring.

And yes, you did become my muse after what we were talking about. Thank you for that long and joyous comment

[> Evil _ MoNkEy <]

:loudcry: Anna, that left me truly inspired. Every response you leave is like a paragraph long and it truly keeps me striving to write more and more. I'm speechless after reading it, and that's saying something. You got the concept out of the poem that I hoped everyone would recieve, and you explained it word for word. That's truly inspiring.

And yes, you did become my muse after what we were talking about. Thank you for that long and joyous comment

lol.... aww..... it was nuthin....dont mention it

[Ivy]

lol.... aww..... it was nuthin....dont mention it

Don't say it was nothing, it had to atleast take 2 to 3 minutes to just write that, not counting the few seconds it took to read it

[> Evil _ MoNkEy <]

lol.... aww..... it was nuthin....dont mention it

Don't say it was nothing, it had to atleast take 2 to 3 minutes to just write that, not counting the few seconds it took to read it

lol... well..... actually it took 15, cus my computer keeps crashing...... and, i read a couple other of of ur peices.... the one called life, but its like.... i go to make a comment, and it freezes...... im sorry i hate my freakin computer..... its gay

[Ivy]

Don't worry. As long as I see that people are looking at the thread, it makes me happy

[> Evil _ MoNkEy <]

Don't worry. As long as I see that people are looking at the thread, it makes me happy

well.... i mean... i wanna comment.... but.... it crashes.... and.... and..... i like comenting.... i dont feel complete unless i comment on a thread i like..... i mean...... i have to say wat i feel.......

and hardly nebody comments on my shit.... and i had such a good poem... as i lay dieing.... i thought for sure ppl would be sayin stuff..... but o well......

newayz...... i know just knowin that theyr lookin at it makes u happy..... but, i mean.... unles they comment, u caqnt be sure if they read the whole thing, or if they got the point....... i mean.... theres so much u dont know....... i mean, i donno... thats just me..... i prefer comments.... feedback, wether it be posative or negative is always helpful

[Ivy]

I feel you a lot on the commenting one, but if they read it, they read it, if not, then hey I'm cool. Because people like you makeup for what the people who don't comment or don't read it do. You leave wonderful feedback, and really strive to say you grasped the hidden message behind the work.

[> Evil _ MoNkEy <]

f up

[Ivy]

Thanks Mc.Maybe...

BTW: I see you got your account back

[neha]

nice

[Ivy]

nice

Thank you very much