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Re: Eloquence - Letter of Apology (Feedback is appreciated)

Postby Oguchi » Aug 27th, '11, 13:20

I could feel the realness in the lyrics alot, some great writing there. The only gripe I have is your flow gets a bit choppy around the 2.00 - 3.00 minute mark, as you've said though you've recognized that yourself.
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Re: Eloquence - Letter of Apology (Feedback is appreciated)

Postby Solace » Aug 27th, '11, 21:53

RainMan44 wrote:Yeah, exactly. If it DID cost him something, then I'd gladly pay him (which I did either way) but....yeah. Anyway, that sounds fairly easy and appealing. And don't worry, you explained it perfectly. I like the fact you can save the settings to the mix, I didn't know that before :y: And the idea of recording in the nude :D Lol nah j, but that shit sounds dope. I'ma definitely look into some stuff.

Thanks man, good lookin' out :y:


BTW, "Inadequate" sounds dope quality wise, didn't know a desktop mic could result in that clear sound :confusion: Also, it's also a dope track. Good shit man :y:

It's not like you save it, and each time you want to mix you just click on "mixing settings 1" or something, but like it keeps whatever you put on last time, so whatever you go to mix it's just a process of multiple clicks instead of checking each time and hearing what it sounds like. And yeah, a crap desktop mic can do wonders these days. :y: Thanks.
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Re: Eloquence - Letter of Apology (Feedback is appreciated)

Postby RainMan44 » Aug 27th, '11, 22:27

@Joel Venom: yeah, the flow was a bit off. I hadn't really rehearsed it THAT much, it was my first time recording. I'm gon' re-do it though. Thanks for the feed bro, and yeah I'll definitely return the favor :y:


@Oguchi: Thanks for the feed man, appreciate it :b:


@Solace: Oh, I see. That's even better, because now everytime you add something to it to make it better a time passes, it will be there available for you. Dope :y:




btw guys, just wondering, do i sound black? 'cause a lot of people been saying "man this ain't you" and all that haha
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Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Re: Eloquence - Letter of Apology (Feedback is appreciated)

Postby Solace » Aug 27th, '11, 22:36

Yeah I was assuming you were black...You arent? LOL
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Re: Eloquence - Letter of Apology (Feedback is appreciated)

Postby RainMan44 » Aug 27th, '11, 23:07

Solace wrote:Yeah I was assuming you were black...You arent? LOL


No, I'm Armenian! haha :sweating:


But it's good that I don't got that Armenian accent.
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Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Re: Eloquence - Letter of Apology (Feedback is appreciated)

Postby Solace » Aug 27th, '11, 23:47

Damn lol, well use it to your advantage to sound G as fuck :whistle:
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Re: Eloquence - Letter of Apology (Feedback is appreciated)

Postby l33chie » Aug 29th, '11, 22:51

I haven't really read the other comments so If I might repeat what someone else might have said. I think this is dope dude, but sometimes the flow was off. The lyrics were awesome, really it was sick, it's like its attacking you lol. I think everything was great except the off flow sometimes. Good job!
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Re: Eloquence - Letter of Apology (Feedback is appreciated)

Postby gutawafang » Sep 3rd, '11, 09:09

very good man :)
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Re: Eloquence - Letter of Apology (Feedback is appreciated)

Postby RainMan44 » Sep 13th, '11, 23:43

Thanks guys :y: :b:

#buuuump :whistle:
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Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Re: Eloquence - Letter of Apology (Feedback is appreciated)

Postby ThomasJ » Sep 26th, '11, 16:46

Dope track.

Are you really Armenian? There's not even a trace of an Armenian accent in this track. :confusion:
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Re: Eloquence - Letter of Apology (Feedback is appreciated)

Postby RainMan44 » Sep 26th, '11, 23:25

ThomasJ wrote:Dope track.

Are you really Armenian? There's not even a trace of an Armenian accent in this track. :confusion:



Thanks man :b:

And yes, I am. But I was born in LA and have been here my whole life so....no accent haha. Thank God. ;)
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Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Re: Eloquence - Letter of Apology (Feedback is appreciated)

Postby Ticalrecords » Sep 27th, '11, 13:29

hey it sounds great, loved the beat. the delivery was good, cud use some work. the biggest thing is do the chorus a lil different maybe layer it so it stands out from the verses. other than that the lyrics were on point, i thot your voice was prolly how it supposed to sound but idk. either way its good stuff. :y:
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Re: Eloquence - Letter of Apology (Feedback is appreciated)

Postby ThomasJ » Sep 27th, '11, 13:30

RainMan44 wrote:
ThomasJ wrote:Dope track.

Are you really Armenian? There's not even a trace of an Armenian accent in this track. :confusion:



Thanks man :b:

And yes, I am. But I was born in LA and have been here my whole life so....no accent haha. Thank God. ;)

Haha, well, you're not born with an accent, so if you've lived in LA your whole life, of course you'll sound American because, well, you ARE American.
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Re: Eloquence - Letter of Apology (Feedback is appreciated)

Postby Blind » Sep 28th, '11, 08:59

Beat is nice, I like it, sounds classic sampled. The quality is on point'' The beginning of verse is great, unusual flow, but i like it. Nice song man, keep it up, u know whar u do :y:
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Re: Eloquence - Letter of Apology (Feedback is appreciated)

Postby RainMan44 » Sep 30th, '11, 06:56

Blind wrote:Beat is nice, I like it, sounds classic sampled. The quality is on point'' The beginning of verse is great, unusual flow, but i like it. Nice song man, keep it up, u know whar u do :y:


Thanks a lot buddy :b:
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Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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