Uncensored [Track 9 LP]

by **J.R.** » Sep 22nd, '11, 22:20

So..You think your uncut?
Bro...This is some dumb stuff,
And I feel the need to call you out on your bull,
I was always the dweeb, the kids picked on in school.
More stiff than shit on a stool,
They would always sit on this fool!
Acting like they Tough, and raw,
Watch out, Nutz about to Stuff your jaws,
Oh and you guys? Yeah Fuck your laws,
They passed me the game of rap so I Struck the ball,
Saying it just luck and all, But they don't know me ,
So they can blow me, And go fuck up and fall,
Off their high horse,
Wanting my whores,
Acting like they can phase me, I just don't give a fuck
Thats how I was raised see, Haters can give it up.

by **RainMan44** » Sep 22nd, '11, 23:24

I've seen better from you, but this was short and well-written. Nothing bad I can say about it. Guess it's some sort of "Interlude" or something.

Feed me?

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by **J.R.** » Sep 23rd, '11, 20:11

Will do so, later, thanks, bump.

by **Man1x** » Sep 24th, '11, 02:34

It's a little simplistic and short, however if flows nice and utilizes a nice 2-4 multi-syllable rhyme scheme. I also like the concept but you differently could have made it more emotional and I know you can. Good stuff as always though, it beats most stuff posted on this site :y: