Geno - Where You Been?

[ChristinaE12]

Uh Oh... Shot's fired in all directions..

Just had to say that is all...



(I'll properly feed this tomorrow. It's been a long day and I'm exhausted.)

[JamaicanPattlez]

Whoa! This was RAW! I usually hold back, but I thought using the word 'faggot' is frowned upon in here. Anyway, this is crazy dope. Rhyme scheme, substance, ANGER (Or portrayal/vibe, lol) and flow are on point. Keep it up my dude!

[JamaicanPattlez]

Thanks my man. Glad you liked it.

Yeah, I use "faggot" in rap sometimes. Definitely needed for this piece tbh.

Appreciate the feed homie.

No worries. Now I can let loose a bit more with my lyrics.

[Sam.]

The Intro was dope as fuck ,but too much things said than needed.Too cocky I might as well say ha ha .
The verse started of real strong with this line

"How you gonna chirp the birds if you ain't hit us yet?"

Then suddenly it got lost some where in the middle ,some of lines were just not that hard hitting to me.But you still managed to put some clever thoughts here and there.The flow suffered the same fate it went on & off at places.

But at the end of the day you did finish it with a clever line ,ha ha Ego represent c'mon stand up ,nahimean ?

Keep at it brah.

[SG.]

I'll feedback in more detail later. All I'll say now is that this is awesome.

You haven't won yet though...

[Man1x]

Thanks for the subliminals

[Man1x]

The Intro was dope as fuck ,but too much things said than needed.Too cocky I might as well say ha ha .
The verse started of real strong with this line

"How you gonna chirp the birds if you ain't hit us yet?"

Then suddenly it got lost some where in the middle ,some of lines were just not that hard hitting to me.But you still managed to put some clever thoughts here and there.The flow suffered the same fate it went on & off at places.

But at the end of the day you did finish it with a clever line ,ha ha Ego represent c'mon stand up ,nahimean ?

Keep at it brah.

Thanks guys, and Sam..did you miss this?

Get your cocky ass outta here, how you gonna flip a hypocrite?

Calling me cocky haha.

And Manix, I wasn't going at you.

Oh, sorry then. I thought the name drop line was for me, nvm.

[JamaicanPattlez]

I bet it was to me.

[Sam.]

I was talking about the Intro.

[Sam.]

So much controversy.

I bet you were after Spyder . (¬ ¬)

[JamaicanPattlez]

That dude couldn't kick a flow if he had 8 legs.

Oh snaaaaaap!

[Sam.]

That dude couldn't kick a flow if he had 8 legs.

Corny ,yet dope.

[Man1x]

Geno, I have been asking this question now I know who can answer it. How do you make good punchlines and how do you do that poetic style Jay-Z has (last one was just an extra question IDK if you can answer it but it'd be nice)

[Sam.]

Geno, I have been asking this question now I know who can answer it. How do you make good punchlines and how do you do that poetic style Jay-Z has (last one was just an extra question IDK if you can answer it but it'd be nice)

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Watch out for this thread.

[Man1x]

Thanks both of you guys