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Spyder - Curtain Call

Postby Spyder » Oct 8th, '11, 19:10

Hook
I know, that the show ended long ago but I hope…
Ill hear from you again but I know…
If you were smart youd stay away from my art
Im just hopin I get to see you at the curtain call.


I know I said I was done, but I still got the will to battle more
After I attack, you Pentagon, leave you with half the Build you had before!
I flow to the seashore, no wait… I unno im done with this female
I meant youll hear my flow forever, your eardrum be-come a seashell!
You an aimless target tryin to make a mark by sayin hardships,
Ill put your face on cartons, sayin lost how this kids fame was started.
Ill have this dude missin, Geno sittin atop of a crude hit list
With rhymes this tight, shit I got Sick Lines like Soup Kitchens.
I havent really heard a personal, I knew that you never would
Shit I could probably diss myself better than you ever could, haha
I know im strainin your thoughts, its like your brain bashed and block
Watch your façade corrode, but im Composed, Sebastian Bach!
Your drop random points, you’re a scat-ter plot and its really tragic
How he a wordsmith when he worships Billy Talent?
Sayin I fold like a Deck, clever punch… this boys too much
Youll fall to my hand, im on some King Shit without a Royal Flush!
You end up Toyd and Fucked like Dildos, so this beef memorabilia
For this whole site to see how I left you Fuckin Dead like Necrophilia!
It pains me to see this Canadian freak cant accept he takin defeat
Youd Improve if you Branched Out Geno like your Family Tree… oh
Lookin like a case of rape and incest, a caveman’s incense
Thought “id like to look like a man” cut his hair, then placed on his chest,
The remains of what came from his head, “now im closer to Shady this time,
And my step-dad will no longer say “come here baby your mine”
Geno step back ok my track is great your raps a waste that I lacerate,
So how you expect to Hold Your Own when you cant even Masturbate!
I don’t expect a response cause by now, surely your text gone
But you can put 2 and 2 together and figure out why Ego bein Slept On.
Let me show you how my brain works, compile files like visionaries
The Left Sector equipped with Spell Checker, Right with Dictionary.
Thesaurus cortex supports text along with the mic in which he carries,
So when it transfers to words, the result is mouth spit Obituaries!
This is the last breath of your last lung, ill diminish ya,
Take my favorite lyrics pen to Signature… on your gravestone to finish ya.

Hook
I know, that the show ended long ago but I hope…
Ill hear from you again but I know…
If you were smart youd stay away from my art
Im just hopin I get to see you at the curtain call.


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Re: Spyder - Curtain Call

Postby Sam. » Oct 8th, '11, 20:14

Mofo ! :worship:

This diss had me in "Aww's" all the time ,really.This is the best battle verse that has some Personals tbh , I mean your Personals never earned you points before ,but this proves that when you decide to go for the kill you can use deeper personals too(lol @ me thinking a Battle Champ can't do personals).Don't wanna go into the detailed feed thing which is pointless at this point because you know as to what you are doing.The punches were well thought of and executed while maintaining the Mutis too at the same time.

I was wondering why you didn't say anything about the "Slept On" song ,damn ! that line was awesome bruh.Well done.


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Re: Spyder - Curtain Call

Postby Spyder » Oct 8th, '11, 20:52

much love bro :worship:
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Re: Spyder - Curtain Call

Postby Mr.DGAF » Oct 8th, '11, 21:07

I'm not really picking sides in this beef, I don't care who started it or whatever. But this verse is on the verge of ridiculous. The 'slept on' reference was my favorite part, I literally said 'damn' when I read that. Two of the better writers here going head to head, but I honestly think this is my favorite verse from y'alls battle.


When ya get the time man, could you hit up my ' Religiously Confused' piece. I can't link it, because I'm on a phone
You'd be surprised...
How many truths you can hide in flows

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Re: Spyder - Curtain Call

Postby Spyder » Oct 8th, '11, 21:20

thanks bro

dont except anyone to pick sides, just enjoy some hot bars :y:
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Re: Spyder - Curtain Call

Postby RainMan44 » Oct 9th, '11, 07:04

Geno is a real cool dude, and I don't talk to you too much but you seem cool too, so I ain't picking sides either.

But, I think this was so far the best drop in the battle between you two.

I can't wait to see what Geno comes back with. :happy:


BTW, how do you write punches like the ones you do? How the fuck do you think of them, man? They're dope as fuck. :y:
"This dude doing this interview wants me to spin a few,
Lyrics while I tie my tennis shoes in the nude
A romantic interlude in a livin’ room,
In an inner tube with a dude with a bit of lube
Fuck that I’m sniffin’ glue, sippin' gin & juice,
And a little bit of paint thinner with my dinner too,
You better pay me for my bars like your rent is due,
Now hurry up and finish dude before I finish you."




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Re: Spyder - Curtain Call

Postby Sam. » Oct 9th, '11, 11:29

Geno wrote:The best part of this is how he disses me for no personals (when I actually had some) and he doesn't drop any himself aside from my musical tastes.

NO PERSONALS ? :confusion:
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Re: Spyder - Curtain Call

Postby mdemaz » Oct 9th, '11, 16:30

I've never seen bars soo organized before.
Intense vocab, great choice of words..Damn.
Shit is fucking retarded man..
It's epic.

Vocab: 9/10
Structure: 8/10
Flow: 8/10
Punches: 10/10

I'm seriously blown away.
Like, what the fuck?
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Re: Spyder - Curtain Call

Postby Spyder » Oct 9th, '11, 17:05

thanks everyone for the feed :worship:
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Re: Spyder - Curtain Call

Postby Sam. » Oct 9th, '11, 19:56

Geno wrote:Point 'em out then. :coffee:

Spyder wrote:
I know I said I was done, but I still got the will to battle more
After I attack, you Pentagon, leave you with half the Build you had before!
I flow to the seashore, no wait… I unno im done with this female
I meant youll hear my flow forever, your eardrum be-come a seashell!
You an aimless target tryin to make a mark by sayin hardships,
Ill put your face on cartons, sayin lost how this kids fame was started.
Ill have this dude missin, Geno sittin atop of a crude hit list
With rhymes this tight, shit I got Sick Lines like Soup Kitchens.
I havent really heard a personal, I knew that you never would
Shit I could probably diss myself better than you ever could, haha
I know im strainin your thoughts, its like your brain bashed and block
Watch your façade corrode, but im Composed, Sebastian Bach!
Your drop random points, you’re a scat-ter plot and its really tragic
How he a wordsmith when he worships Billy Talent?
Sayin I fold like a Deck, clever punch… this boys too much
Youll fall to my hand, im on some King Shit without a Royal Flush!
You end up Toyd and Fucked like Dildos, so this beef memorabilia
For this whole site to see how I left you Fuckin Dead like Necrophilia!
It pains me to see this Canadian freak cant accept he takin defeat
Youd Improve if you Branched Out Geno like your Family Tree… oh
Lookin like a case of rape and incest, a caveman’s incense
Thought “id like to look like a man” cut his hair, then placed on his chest,
The remains of what came from his head, “now im closer to Shady this time,
And my step-dad will no longer say “come here baby your mine”

Geno step back ok my track is great your raps a waste that I lacerate,
So how you expect to Hold Your Own when you cant even Masturbate!
I don’t expect a response cause by now, surely your text gone
But you can put 2 and 2 together and figure out why Ego bein Slept On.
Let me show you how my brain works, compile files like visionaries
The Left Sector equipped with Spell Checker, Right with Dictionary.
Thesaurus cortex supports text along with the mic in which he carries,
So when it transfers to words, the result is mouth spit Obituaries!
This is the last breath of your last lung, ill diminish ya,
Take my favorite lyrics pen to Signature… on your gravestone to finish ya.



Really ?
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Re: Spyder - Curtain Call

Postby Spyder » Oct 9th, '11, 20:27

dont forget the flip of the fold like a deck line

and he loves Billy Talent ;)
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Re: Spyder - Curtain Call

Postby Sam. » Oct 9th, '11, 20:58

Geno wrote:The Billy Talent line, the hair line...I guess.. and the fact that he mentions my online name is the only "personal" if you even wanna call it that.

And calling me a female is a good one. :coffee:

So there are personals right ? Why deny it in the 1st place ? :coffee: :coffee:
Spyder wrote:dont forget the flip of the fold like a deck line

and he loves Billy Talent ;)

Yeah ! that too. :toocool:
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Re: Spyder - Curtain Call

Postby Sam. » Oct 9th, '11, 21:25

Geno wrote:Because they're weak and you're on his dick about it. :whistle:

Weak ? :unsure: and wh.... :coffee:
I'm not on anyones dick dude.I haven't said anything that suggest you that I'm taking his side in this.If you think so i would be heavily disappointed at you because we both are cool since a very long time.C'mon brah ! don't drag me into this ,i never thought you would say this.
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Re: Spyder - Curtain Call

Postby Sam. » Oct 9th, '11, 21:34

Geno wrote:Someone pointed it out to me and it seems like you're the one I should be beefing with instead of Spyder tbh.

But whatever maaaaan.

I gave you the real Feed to your drop as to what I felt about it.Still you think this way ? I'm sad. :(
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Re: Spyder - Curtain Call

Postby Sam. » Oct 9th, '11, 21:39

Gennette wrote:I said it's whatever man.

iight peace . :shifty:
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