Ego - Lost & Found

[JamaicanPattlez]

This is just pure amazing. This is probably your best project yet. Love the topic, hook was amazing, and the beat to the song was VERY integral to the entire piece. Also, I liked how you guys did the whole Geno/Alieus underlying monologue and whatnot. Very impressive. I'd love to see this recorded. Keep it up you guys, great work. 9/10.

[JamaicanPattlez]

No problem guys! This beat is amazing too, really complimented the entire work. This site looks pretty dope though (the link of beat's site) and I'm looking through it and damn... I wanna produce high quality stuff too! But yeah, I really enjoyed it.

[Words]

this piece was great. The storytelling aspect was really vivid and the dynamic back and forth made it even more interesting. On top of that, the creativity in your rhymes was also extraordinary.
Good work

[Sam.]

Since you guys had fun writing it, I had more fun reading it. Dope choice of beat to be honest. I must say, both of you managed to stay on beat the whole time and it seemed like the beat was made for this song. Perfect Syllables in each line, helped in building a perfect structure, could lay it easily on the beat. The story was a little confusing at 1st, I had to read it 3 times to get; who was who, lmao. The best thing is, the chemistry between you two, the way both of you maintained the same “Previous Multi” without spoiling the storyline is commendable. But to be frank, Menzo had a better imaginary on this one, he told his part of the story well, not taking anything from Geno but...the truth had to be said. There’s something that I didn’t like (to an extent) even though it was the most integral part of the whole collaboration and important for the story line was use of conversation in the lines, seems nice, but some where down the line it seemed a little odd, It could have been a little indirect (for ex: Guilty Conscience), but whatever it maybe, you guys did a splendid job.Don't get mad at me for saying this but the way that I perceived this it reminded me of that song.

Keep slayin 'em.

[SG.]

That was incredible. Storytelling, rhyming, chemistry, it was all amazing. This is one of the few pieces where the beat is required, and I really like that. You should record this. I mean it.

A while ago, I called you "inspiration" and you disagreed. This proves it.

[ChristinaE12]

Holy shit.. << First words that came to my mind after reading this.

This piece was pretty much flawless, to me.

The rhymes were excellent. You had such great chemistry throughout the whole thing. The story line is great and was told in a *different* way too.

The beat couldn't be any better of a match for the lyrics and rhymes. Everything seemed so natural and smooth. It's hard to believe the beat wasn't made for this piece.

The imagery was top notch.

I think you guys pulled the concept out wonderfully and couldn't have been done much, if any, better.

Pretty much everything I've said about your pieces before, this is the same but ten times better.

I'm impressed again.

[Sam.]

Don't stay under the impression that this piece didn't make the impact that both of you intended to do, it did have a impact.The things is..the conversation came out toooo natural.

[Sam.]

Too natural? That's the point. If it wasn't natural it'd be forced.

Can I say more like a normal/casual type.It's good though, new things should be done.

[Sam.]

What I meant here was ...god!, you get mad so soon. In reference to this piece.
Natural Conversation = Normal Conversation = Casual Conversation.

And I said everything was nice and if this was done in a more indirect way, it would have been good too.I even said I've a problem with it to an extent, not fully.

Can you high light the parts you felt were too casual. I'm legitimately asking you, not picking a fight.

These are Bars that I'm taking about(Complete lines)
Don't play me or phase me, you hopeless as fuck, whore!
{Uhh, Kate he's yellin' for Stacey..Hey! What so rough for?!
(opens door) Man are you crazy?} Where’s the cunt stored?
There you are, come here (rip) “You’re tearing my brazier!"

&

'Kay, let us leave} Yo, I got an umbrella in the trunk
Who woulda thought, that two young fellas who got fucked
By a crazy bitch, wait...there she is! Let’s make her pay for this
“No! Please! Just wait a sec!” (stab) Argh, save it bitch!
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Now look at these part, it was okay because you were taking to the next character and not amongst each other.

Hey bitch! The story about the escargot? It’s fake
I guess you’re sorry eh? Aw, don’t just storm away

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You soaked my soles! (stomp) Worthless slut, whoever you are
You’re pretty earnest bud...the body? I got the perfect spot – go in the car...

I know that both of you worked your ass off in this, I'm just saying what I felt after reading it. I've no intention in mocking any one of you because of any thing that happened in the past. If I felt about it in a different way then, what's wrong with it ? I don't get it. Tell me am I giving you wrong feed? If yes I'll never do it doe.

Even I'm not picking a fight with mah boyz just saying duders.

[Sam.]

LOL ^
I'm waiting for Menzo's reply, let's see if he understood anything that I said in reply to his post.

[JamaicanPattlez]

I think he's trying to say that the lines were so casual like "Oh, howdy do". Idunno.

[Sam.]

I think he's trying to say that the lines were so casual like "Oh, howdy do". Idunno.

Some what this.

I'll say this once last time & then I'm outtie. Imagine the Dr.West Skit from Relapse, okay.What if they had there conversations in Rhymes? ~ Getting the idea. That's what I noticed in the lines that I pointed out.The lines that I pointed out were like day to day conversation put in Rap's. Now see this is something new that both of you tried so it was for the attempt. I've no problem with that, the only point that I was trying to convey was that if it would have been more indirect it would have been dope, yet again. There's no point in discussing this in so much detail. If you still don't get it and feel like making a big issue out of this then, I'm sorry for that feed.

[Sam.]

The point was for it to be natural, like every day conversation.

If you listen to Eminem, which you do, you know that's what makes him great. His raps feel like he's just talking, and somehow the shit all rhymes.

We were kinda doing that.

Ayt homie, I feel ya.

[Emadyville]

I never was so in depth reading the lyrics to something. This needs to be recorded. This beats sick and makes me wanna write to it

You guys are beyond on fire, I'm extremely impressed

[Sam.]

I was listening to "Eminem - Stan" today, going through the song made me re think the things that I said here and makes the little innovative thing that you guys did more appealing.It also negates what I said to an extent.

Just felt like saying this.

Peace Ego.