Spy & Sam - 3 Minutes Til Death

[Ka0t1c]

sam, most of the flow flew over my head
but you got strong vocab, good wit. fave line was last line


spyder, amazing verse, very lyrically talented, def. had me reading for more. great knowledge, and that is powerful!

i enjoyed this piece

[Spyder]

thanks K

and Sam your still pmin me your shit

[Sam.]

I'm not quitting writing, just not gonna share anything here.In fact I'm writing something right now.There's no genuine feeling to feed in people anymore, after all that I've done.

That sucks man. If you ever do want feed though, PM me some stuff. I'd be more than happy to feed it bruh, no problem.

Sure.I'll see what I can do.

sam, most of the flow flew over my head
but you got strong vocab, good wit. fave line was last line


spyder, amazing verse, very lyrically talented, def. had me reading for more. great knowledge, and that is powerful!

i enjoyed this piece

The last line was a dope punchline, IDK whether any one got that??!! The Punch in the 3rd last line was also my personal favorite.

and Sam your still pmin me your shit

What?

[Spyder]

im sayin if your writing u gotta pm me your work so i can peep it

[Sam.]

im sayin if your writing u gotta pm me your work so i can peep it

That's what I'm planning to do.
Thanks man.

[Enimee]

damn yall two deaf stepped it up with this one.

sam your vocab and imagery really had me goin through the whole verse all out, definilty real deep and sadistic type feel, the only thing that i would have liked a little from use is flow...but thats just my reading interpretation, id love to hear this audio

spyder those lyrics were epic man, the jesus moses line is needs some honorable mention that was dope..well done man i like the way you strung together multis and drug out rhyme schemes to complete your thoughts...almost perfect verse man the only thing i would improve would be your idea's...what i mean is it seemed like you rushed some of your concepts just to finish the line, but it had potential to be much better for instance where you had the "last words of a dying jason line" i think you coulda played with that a lil more....other then that fuckin perfect man


god damn awesome collab man this shit was raw

Thanks a lot man. I can't promise the Audio now, maybe later.

I've to admit some of the lines had to phrased awkwardly because I had to maintain the proper Multi, I'll work on that though.I'm using the UK accent for this one and I can flow through this easily, guess you didn't know about this(No big deal, no one knew that Ha Ha).

werd i feel u gud shit man thats dope

[Enimee]

thanks for the feed all

and En that line was Sams

[Spyder]

ayo Sam i can help you with diction and phrasing so you dont have to word it weird
to make your multi's

[Sam.]

ayo Sam i can help you with diction and phrasing so you dont have to word it weird
to make your multi's

Thanks for the gesture man.
I can say that I actually forced some Rhymes up there. The basic problem was taking the RA style and applying it here, that at places caused problem's and I had to use weird phrases just to keep the style going and to maintain the Multi. If you Google, most of the lines are actually phrases in English and nothing that I cooked up myself. I even tried your style of doing punches but some how settled for this. I was thinking we could make a crew after this.

I'm working on some bars, pretty much similar to this.I'll either post it here or PM you.


@Enimee: Thanks once again.

[Eedee]

Good shit from both of you.

Sam: sick multi's abound here!! I feel like on some bars there was TOO much cramped into them and it felt too long and flow was off (maybe I just was reading it wrong). But other than that, vocab was extensive as shit.

Spyder: Same as Sam, had some sick rhymes in there. Both of you had that " " factor going on that reminded me of a lyrically talented MC with Bizarre's mind haha.

Good shit, keep dropping, both of you!

[Sam.]

Lol at the Bizzare compliment, I don't know how to handle that ha ha.
Anyway Thanks man. I hope you got the punchlines too.

5 Pages.
Spyder give me that Black Color Name you promised.

[Spyder]

as if

[Sam.]

Sam - This was incredibly underwhelming considering the hype you gave it. It was like reading a list and not a verse.

I don't know why you feel this way? But in my defense I would say that the whole thing was written in "Rhyme Asylum" style.Since you don't know their style you didn't like the approach that I used.

The multies were weak for the most part, if not non-existent, which cripples the flow.

They were weak? I admit at places the Multis were weak because(again) I used the UK accent for most of the verse to bend the words. I can't take the fact when you say that they were "non-exixtent", apart from the tough one's, the rhymes with normal accent-free words had good Multis.

which cripples the flow

I've the flow nailed.

It's mediocrity was masked by the big vocab, which is only impressive you can say something while using it. There was no aim, no story to be told, nothing. It was really boring to me.

Listen to any "Rhyme Asylum" song, they involve all the element that you criticized and they are fucking dope.This was a straight out Punchline Track and it doesn't need any "aim, no story to be told, nothing"

Thank you for the feed Genoz.

[Spyder]

thanks for the feed Genome

that was the plan to branch out after the EP, i said that it would be all horror and punches.

and i dont post beats because it not important, its text. if it was audio obv youd hear it.
i dont want people to worry about how to catch a flow and the flow i used, have that get messed up,
and them not like the track as much as if i didnt post one.

readers naturally pick up a flow, different for each track. which is how ive had feed like
"loved the flow on this one" if i were to say no this is the flow it may ruin it.
in audio theyd hear how i was doing it and thats what it is

[Sam.]

We can never argue, there's no need at all to think that way ha ha.

I didn't bit their style, I'm inspired from their style dude, just like you're from Tech(lol). RA x 100000 doper than me, agreed.

No one knew about the UK Accent anyway, I forgot to mention that.I didn't know Spyder would post this so soon, once he did, I was like fuck it "Who's gonna mind the accent shit? " ~No issues with that.The real fun comes when you use that accent, but I guess I fucked up.

As you can see many of us found trouble with flow and rhyming, the one's who knew about RA liked this.

And if your aim was punchlines you failed because there wasn't any that stood out.

You're clearly missing the point or just hating, but that's your point of view.Not everyone will understand or like the punches that I did.

I'm working on all the things doe because some of your points overlapped with some other feeds too.