I've Still Got It

[SG.]

Hey, by the way, there's no serious beef with any of you guys. Except Block, he pisses me off.

[J.R.]

I give up

PM please.

[Man1x]

I give up

PM please.

I don't stay current enough to know what these disses mean, so pointin' out would be great.

[Sam.]

You should let Block speak his mind about this, PM him this in a peaceful manner. Don't worry he's just a chill dude.

[SG.]

Maybe I've just got a bad impression, but he seems to act like a dick to everybody. And not in a Master Chief funny way.

[Sam.]

I find him pretty chilled out, he's just more firm and confident about his opinions.

[SG.]

Maybe. I dunno, I'll see what he thinks.

[RainMan44]

I like this one way better. Good flow to it, good rhyming, good content, good execution. No one line that stood out above the rest, as earlier stated, but an overall consistent piece.

Good stuff

[Block]

This is cute, I suppose. Was it written to an instrumental?

When I first started I was just as eager to prove myself. Keep at it.

[SG.]

This is cute

Best feed I've ever gotten.

Alright, to the point, of course this was written to an instrumental. But it's just something that comes into my head, and I don't think "I must write down this beat I wrote to". For most of my songs, it doesn't affect the message of the song.

Now, this is no first attempt at writing. So don't get all twisted about how eager to prove myself I am. I don't need to prove myself to anybody. If you think this shit's wack, by all means, say it. But don't turn round saying I'm wack when you've only read one track (a 16-line track that took 10 minutes, might I add). So I don't need you patronising me. I've got enough shit in real life to deal with without getting worried about some stranger on the Internet.

[Block]

This is cute

Best feed I've ever gotten.

Alright, to the point, of course this was written to an instrumental. But it's just something that comes into my head, and I don't think "I must write down this beat I wrote to". For most of my songs, it doesn't affect the message of the song.

Now, this is no first attempt at writing. So don't get all twisted about how eager to prove myself I am. I don't need to prove myself to anybody. If you think this shit's wack, by all means, say it. But don't turn round saying I'm wack when you've only read one track (a 16-line track that took 10 minutes, might I add). So I don't need you patronising me. I've got enough shit in real life to deal with without getting worried about some stranger on the Internet.

There's an awful lot of self validation going on in this post for someone who's not trying to prove themselves.

[SG.]

Ok, that's your opinion, by all means, have one.

[Block]

Ok, that's your opinion, by all means, have one.

There's is a very definitive difference between opinion and fact. Opinions are subjective and subject to change. Facts are not. What I stated is not an opinion, rather a fact of the matter at hand.

Your post above the one I just quoted is screaming for validation. From the, "(writtin in 10 minutes might I add)" to the, "this isn't my first attempt at writing!!!!" Now if I were you, being as poorly written as this is, I would have opted for the this IS my first attempt at writing scenario. It's probably a better look for you in the long-run.

Then there's the famous attempt to be condescending and assert your pseudo-authority over the situation. In your case it goes, "I've got enough shit in real life to be worried about, without having to be worried about someone on the internet." To anyone not familiar with the situation, this may seem as though I've been diligently persuing your threads / topics and harrassing you. This isn't the case, though, is it? Nope. I've only posted toward you twice before this topic (neither of which have been insulting, moreso informative). But poor ole Zabe doesn't seem to handle critique very well and decided he had had enough of that mean bully Block.

See, you don't have to worry about someone on the internet, you waste of oxygen. You created this drama. It's quite literally all in your head. I don't know you. I don't converse with you--nor do I care to further accentuate either avenues.

Continue on with your lackluster attempts at whatever it is you call this menial jibberish, and I'll be on my merry li'l way. Have a good day.

[SG.]

Ok, sure. Have a nice day yourself.

It would be helpful if you could tell me why it's bad, rather than just saying it's bad. I need constructive feedback, after all.

[Mr.DGAF]

Not to hop into this arguement or whatever, but Block. Dude you think you could feed a piece of mine? I just remember seeing your writtens on here, and they were really impressive, and I just wanted some more opinions on my work. If not it's cool, just a wondering.