Wreck ft. Asterisk- Fuck The Haters

[Wreck]

I approached my big homie about doing a collab, then with the idea of pent up anger & frustration at haters, to do a verse about it, & it came out a little bit like this.


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Wreck
Haters lashed, just cause it made it alas
with creative raps, about my faded past
as a white MC, I'm nice you see
nobody saw the light in me, how I bite these beats
Always gotta worry about my Pops, coming in & out of Jail
I'm outta bail, I love him to death, but it's like his life is like a thousand fails
Struggling with school, every minute Moms is on my case
like Snoop was for murder back in '94, I'm being wrongfully chased
Me & my brother used to clash, now we above it, & laugh
& look back, at how shook that, shit was, & say fuck it, it's in the past
Doubters have their views on white MCs, won't get respect
Bitch, I'm Wreck, no REALLY, BITCH I'm Wrecked, fucked up life you guess
With the Mic I'm blessed, it's my drug, it's my white, inject
My life, I'm fighting it, sometimes I have to teach it a lesson & Tina-Ike it
Battled depression, but life's a ride, grab the saddle & don't stress it
And I refuse, & choose not to listen to the past cause we're living in the present

Asterisk
I've been facing haters, crazy ain't it?
How people refuse to embrace new names, but
When you succeed they gon' play the mayn, and
Who said you wouldn't make it just yay'd, he's famous
They paid despair, will you repay them paychecks?
Peps ain't drinking non' but flames and paintballs
They be playing, cuz they acknowledge the potential
Just refusing to admit it, trying hard, unsuccessful
I'm tired of these dumb shits, they like trying to get flamed
Talk shit, talk shit, then they're crying to get aid
If your name stamp's "no good" don't think you the OG
Cuz you'll get your face stamped, get shipped, 'till it's no-seen
Wouldn't hurt to say a good word, wouldn't hurt to pause insults
I refuse to be stopped by a bunch of fucks with down syndrome
Criticize fairly, do it for improvement
Or step aside, don't even review the fucking music

[Sam.]

Not at all impressive, both of you.

Wreck:
You tried an hand at a different Rhyme Scheme but you seemed so hella confused with it that you didn't even use proper words for it. Sometimes you focussed on the Multis and sometimes you didn't.

Haters lashed, just cause it made it alas
with creative raps, about my faded past

as a white MC, I'm nice you see
nobody saw the light in me, how I bite these beats

You realize how much the Flow was off with that type of Rhyming? At least try to maintain consistency for a while, I know you can alter flow both in Audio and and in Text to an extent, but this was way too much for me to handle.

The only saving grace of this was the content, which was fresh and really different. Maintain a proper structure, and do proper justice to this; why waste such dope thoughts?

Asterik:
Same for you, as far the content is concerned you to had a decent one. But the 1st half had barely had any proper Rhyming at the end, why? Writers Block? I think that's the case. You need to work a lot on everything man, this is not what I expected from you when I entered this thread. Practice bro, PRACTICE. You're a far better writer than this.

[Wreck]

This wasn't a multi piece for me, it was getting sh*t off my chest, and I bet my bro would tell you the same thing about his. But thanks for the feed Sam.

[Sam.]

This wasn't a multi piece for me, it was getting sh*t off my chest, and I bet my bro would tell you the same thing about his. But thanks for the feed Sam.

Throwaway verse? or is that an excuse? (No offence intended).

[Wreck]

This wasn't a multi piece for me, it was getting sh*t off my chest, and I bet my bro would tell you the same thing about his. But thanks for the feed Sam.

Throwaway verse? or is that an excuse? (No offence intended).

I wrote the verse because there's been a lotta shit goin on, and I wanted to write something related to it, I don't consider it a bad verse at all. The one line you highlighted was a multi, & it flowed perfectly in my head.