Underground Choppers (Featuring SupaNov

[Atone]

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=NN7if3ag9KM

the full version will be on the album, with an extra verse from me, and i'm going to attempt to get a couple others on this, hopefully a female emcee



Link Of Feed: viewtopic.php?f=38&t=137663&p=1826698#p1826698

[Almostlity]

You come here and ask us for advice and you wont even listen to us.

Just quit, this is unlistenable..

[_Ironic_]

1st dude)

quality= horrible

I didn't understand a single word you said...

this had no flow


delivery was straight I guess


2nd dude was MUCH better...actually was able to flow...he actually had a really good flow...delivery was decent...I fucks with this dude...2nd dude that hopped on the track killed it, especially when the beat stopped and he slowed the flow down and kept the same delivery...it's actually harder to do then he made it seem...props on that

overally 2nd dude saved AND made the song

7.5/10

2/10 without him...


RTF if u get the chance, judging from other comments you dont give feedback so feel privileged i still gave u feed.

[Atone]

lol fuck it i quit

[AbramIsaac]

Why don't you just try to take some of the advice you've been given and apply it? This is seriously fucking awful. Just like EVERYONE told you it would be. Either start taking your music seriously, or do the internet a favor and just fucking quit.

You obviously don't give a shit about making quality music when you won't take the time to at least make it look like you tried. I dare you to just try to apply some of the tips you've been given here. Just once.

Thank anyone who's ever wasted their time giving you feed, because most forums wouldn't even fuck with you, especially if you just ignored every bit of constructive criticism like you do here.

Don't worry, this will be the last time I pop in to chastise you. I just have been holding out hope that you would prove me wrong after I called you a joke. It was a bastard thing to say to someone that makes music. I see you don't care to prove me right with every new track you post.

Well, I'll stop looking at the reasons to act like a bastard. I would advise everyone else to do the same, at least until you start caring about your music again.

[mdemaz]

Don't fucking quit man..It's only a minor issue to be off-beat.

It's a basic thing and once you do it, people will start taking you seriously.
Every time you drop something here I get a chill up my spine..Like oooh in before the hate..You know.

Maybe you need a different approach now.
Yeah, I seen some of your early tapes when you were on-beat, you were great.
I think it's time you applied the feed and start stepping up.

I'm stepping up now, so you should follow my example bro.
If you compare my tracks from My Recovery to the demos I leaked from Lyrical Death, it's day and night.
All I needed was to learn basic shit..

2012 is a new year.

[Atone]

Don't fucking quit man..It's only a minor issue to be off-beat.

It's a basic thing and once you do it, people will start taking you seriously.
Every time you drop something here I get a chill up my spine..Like oooh in before the hate..You know.

Maybe you need a different approach now.
Yeah, I seen some of your early tapes when you were on-beat, you were great.
I think it's time you applied the feed and start stepping up.

I'm stepping up now, so you should follow my example bro.
If you compare my tracks from My Recovery to the demos I leaked from Lyrical Death, it's day and night.
All I needed was to learn basic shit..

2012 is a new year.

lol i aint really gonna quit, just not sure how to keep shit on beat, i mean, when i finish a track it sounds dope to me, maybe i should do the vocals, and have somebody make the beat around it, idk,

[mdemaz]

Fucking..I think it's obvious that you need help mixing.

You don't seem to know anybody that can help you...I'd help you if I could.
Seriously.
All you need is to stay on beat, line bars up cleanly and have a better microphone.

That's all you need.
It's funny how you could avoid all this ridicule with just with those things.
It's almost laughable.

But seriously though, I've tried to stick up for you this far, but it's seriously time for a new approach man.

[Trimss]

Dude being on beat is like..

Listen to Renegade. Almost every single snare sound, there's a rhyme. That's riding the beat lmao.

If you put your end-of-line rhymes on a snare sound, that would already be a step forward.

Don't quit, learn to stay on beat step by step then buy a 15$ microphone and it'll be ok dude. believe me.

[iain08]

Aside from your lack of flow, you're impossible to understand. When you tried 'rapping' fast you didn't enunciate any syllables and it sounded slurred as fuck.If you keep making music, at least start slow and learn to actually say the words you're rapping instead of just stumbling through them and sounding like an idiot.

[Ka0t1c]

That was incredibly off beat and the quality was so bad I couldn't understand much.

complete joke

[Trimss]

^ Well there are some beats well it's harder to notice where the snare hits, in the beggining I didn't even know rappers were on beat at first lmao. Then I came on this forum and had to learn what that means.

[Blu]

I'm gonna be honest, the second you started rapping, I started cracking up!

Dude. Start with a slower flow first. Matter fact, go cover some original rap songs. That'll help you get the "essence" of how you rap and keep up with the beat.

Go Stanley, your time has come to cover "Lose Yourself" and record it. GO!!!!

[Tranquil]

I've listened to your songs when you have dropped them but never bothered to post because I was going to say what everyone else was saying.

I was where you are now when I first started, but I applied every little bit of feedback that I got from here and my music has improved Heaps! First off what you need to do is buy a better mic, shit I have a $40 mic and the quality is good. Also you need to learn some mixing techniques, thoroughly search through Youtube or get some tips off other people.

Delivery is also a problem. You sound really bored, un-enthusiastic and it really sounds like your softly rapping into the mic, trying not to be heard or something like that. If you want people to enjoy your songs you have to snap out of that. Pump yourself if before going in and recording, give it your all. It takes awhile but in the end it the delivery will just come natural and it will sound good.

Flow. Off beat. Construct your lyrics so each end rhyme hits on a snare or a kick drum. Practice on your flow so its almost perfect, because when its off beat its really un enjoyable to listen. I still fuck up with my flow sometimes, so it all comes with practice but your flow on this song is pretty much un-listanable. Show your songs to some people before you release, some people that no what their talking about so they can give you feedback, then you go and apply that feedback then release the track.

Pretty much just listen and apply on what people are saying here, and just practice heaps. Never rush a song, take your time with it and it will pay off. I wish you the best and I hope to hear some quality music out of you soon. Keep it up man.

[Fleka]

I know shit about making songs, but, when you hear the beat, don`t you just like, know how to rap on it?