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Mic Rant (Fiasco Day 8)

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Re: Mic Rant (Fiasco Day 8)

Postby Arabian Shady » Jun 25th, '12, 17:21

haha I really digg the concept. Pretty cool take on a very abused topic.
Had some difficulty with the flow, prolly cause of the structure, but i never really pay attention to that either haha
I like some of the lines as well.
Good stuff
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Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
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Re: Mic Rant (Fiasco Day 8)

Postby Slim Fiasco » Jun 25th, '12, 20:20

Hahaha, this was pure awesomeness man, I fucking loved it! Great idea and I love how the microphone felt bullied, lol. But moreover, I liked how pissed off it sounded. You conveyed the necessary emotions with excellence.
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Re: Mic Rant (Fiasco Day 8)

Postby ShAdYTiLIDie » Jun 26th, '12, 03:45

Dude, great drop! way to execute the topic really well. Everything seemed to flow really good and the rhymes stayed on point! nice job!
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Re: Mic Rant (Fiasco Day 8)

Postby Mr.DGAF » Jun 26th, '12, 21:21

Hahaha, this was good man. I've seen the concept before but you did this really well. The entire verse was actually one of my favorites from you. Rhyming was pretty good, flow was easy to catch. The last four lines were my favorite, especially with the ending. Food stuff man.
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