Geno - Knocked (Fiasco Day 9)

[Emadyville]

You had some good multis on this and i felt an anger in the verse that was present throughout. The flow seemed off at points and rhyming fluidity with continuity, with how they are pronounced, I didn't think fit and kinda bothered me. I felt like you were almost trying to much, but its the 9th verse so I understand. Def not your best bro, just gotta be honest with it.

[Mr.DGAF]

Obviously the multies are nice. I felt like for the most part I got the flow, not usually a problem with your pieces though. Obviously you're one of the better writers here, so most criticism may fall into nit-picking. But for some reason, I wasn't feeling this piece as much as some of the ones you've dropped for the experiment. The rhyme mentioned above stood out, that's the only criticism I can point out that would make sense haha. The rest is all personal preference, the piece was pretty good on a technical stand-point. Just not my favorite verse from you if that makes sense haha.

[Gummybur]

Then I'll never be touchin' another frickin' thing,
That you produce, write, sing or spit, it's all fake as fuck,
You're just a boob like Springer's chicks, at least they take a punch,
It's the truth and, why's sittin' in, your basement a basic pun?
I don't know, but I have hope so maybe I can WAKE YOU UP.

SPRINGER BIT WAS SICK

[Emadyville]

It was actually "lost fluidity / continuity" and I admit it was semi-forced. I'll be honest, this is probably my least favourite because of the topic we had to use. I can't really diss someone if I don't have a reason lol. Tough one.

But I didn't wanna not drop, so I did my best.

yeah man i hear you, still dont think that rhymed unless my pronunciation of the two words has been wrong. doesnt matter, it wasnt bad and i know you gotta do this shit everyday for awhile, i just wanted to keep it real and obviously not give bullshit feed homie

[Emadyville]

yeah thats why i love rap tho, words can look like they rhyme and dont, and at the same time you can make words that dont rhyme rhyme. its difficult as well doing writtens versus audio. get in the sup guys thread so we can talk about our shit now!