The TRshady Forum became read-only in December 2014. The 10 year history will live on, in this archive.
Continue the discussion with the new home for the Eminem and Hip Hop discussion: HipHopShelter.com.

Hesky - The Mask (TR Shady Tape #7)

Want to share a poem, story or a moving article? Share creative literature text here.

Re: Hesky - The Mask (TR Shady Tape #7)

Postby Mr.DGAF » Aug 17th, '12, 20:42

This was really good man. Flow was damn near flawless dude, it was so nice. The way you worded it was perfect, the line I thought texecuted best in this case was the "born into unlike yourself" line. The rhymes were awesome, I like in the beginning of that second verse where you come back to the first rhyme scheme after leaving it for a line. This was really well written man. If you've really left then I guess you won't see this haha, but I figured regardless, it deserved some feed.
You'd be surprised...
How many truths you can hide in flows

Image
Image
Quest for Six
Team Emma Stone
Buns till amazing... :')
User avatar
Mr.DGAF
Renegade
Renegade
 
Posts: 2349
Joined: Aug 15th, '11, 04:10
Location: In the back seat of your truck, with duct tape stretched out.
Gender: Male

Re: Hesky - The Mask (TR Shady Tape #7)

Postby Wreck » Aug 18th, '12, 22:47

This was really nice, really enjoyed reading it alongside the beat, different type of topic/type song, but it was dope regardless. Multis & vocabulary were the best/stuck out significantly in this piece particularly, & the light sounding beat fit the lyrics well, as well. Would love to work with you in the near future. Good job :y:.
My Beats Page- https://www.facebook.com/pages/Wreckles ... 08?fref=ts
Image
My Debut Album- Life or Death- Coming Soon
User avatar
Wreck
Role Model
Role Model
 
Posts: 3511
Joined: Sep 5th, '08, 23:19
Location: South Jersey
Gender: Male

Re: Hesky - The Mask (TR Shady Tape #7)

Postby CrashBand » Mar 10th, '13, 12:39

Nice bump.

This was fucking awesome. I loved the start - the opening bars really set the tone for this piece to be a great song as opposed to just great lyrics.

My favourite lines were definitely the end of the first verse. Just the way it flowed and everything was so hard hitting.

Very well-written piece. You're a good writer man.
I'm not tryin to be rude, but I sincerely wanna fuck the taste out of your mouth
User avatar
CrashBand
Role Model
Role Model
 
Posts: 3579
Joined: Feb 17th, '12, 10:10
Location: New Zealand
Gender: Male


Return to Creative Writing



Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users

cron