Spyder - Symbiotic (single)

[ShadysDisciple]

The rhymes in this were fucking dope. I really liked this particular part:
"Bury the hatchet? I dig a ditch for my foes
Spit fire so ill only burn the bridge of your nose!!
Rippin syllable flow with instant control
Take the piss out my rhymes ill turn your kidneys to stone."

Like someone else said (I think it was Ax-D?) You need to work on your flow a bit. But overall good track.

[Spyder]

thanks for the feed man glad you liked that part.

feel free to feed the EP

[Le Tunisien]

hmmmmm the lyrics are awesome..i mean the rhyming is dope i loved it...but man i felt like sometimes the flow was a bit rushed here and there but your delivery was good it sounded like the old em i could tell lol i guess good job you could do better

[Spyder]

thanks for the check man, u can check the rest of the tape somewhere in the AS
and yeah idk people say i sound like old Em, i personally dont hear it but oh well

[Cobo Black]

why can't I find the audio? Some one dumb proof me where it is....that being said, I'm a text head too, and reading it flowed nicely.

"I’m cuttin dope lines with shavin razor blades
On my Kanye fuckin up shit that’s Taylor made!"

^ That is the kind of line, that is the epitome of what I look for in hip hop. Multiple syllables, and a good use of wordplay. Niice!

[Spyder]

thanks for the feed man
the track should be on that clickable link, id say it may have been removed from inactivity
but tuni just listened today, so should be right there man

[Cobo Black]

I went and left some feed back on Hulk share. Your writing is on point, but you're delivery needs...something. I don't know how to describe it other than you are rapping with a tone and the presence that feels like i'm listening to a guy who shouldn't know how to rhyme words well...but does. In a less harsh version, its like when you see mike tyson fight, then see him speak. Something doesn't match.

Now, I wouldn't say that if there was no hope, there is...because at certain times...you nail a tone and a confidence that works...but then other times....its way off.

You need to play with your delivery more, I went through a few of your songs and your delivery isn't on par with your ability to write. I don't mean that in negative way. I know it hard to hear, I know how hard criticism is to hear for me, but hearing some changed the way I delivered and over time, I found something that suited my voice and who I was better.

No that is the criticism, that being said, you are really talented at writing and lyric wise, you are exactly what I look for in a song to be a fan of. Find your accent, your delivery speed or a way to match your tone and type of voice to the way you deliver...and put it over the right type of beats and you can really have some hits man. Good luck.

[Spyder]

thanks for the feed man, ya ive been fucking around with my delivery a bit so hopefully i get something that sounds apeasing to everyone

[Cobo Black]

thanks for the feed man, ya ive been fucking around with my delivery a bit so hopefully i get something that sounds apeasing to everyone

It was hard for me to say, because a voice is something you have limited control over. If your lyrics weren't so on point, I would waste my time or deal with the trouble of trying to find the right words to explain my criticism without sounding like a dick.

Remember, Jay-z and Kanye West both were told their voices weren't good for rapping. They just had to find a delivery that SUITED their voice, thats all. And thats what you have to do.

[Spyder]

i didnt think you were being a dick, others have had a problem with my voice and choice of beat due to it not fitting the lyrics.

like i said ima keep working on trying to find something that sounds natural even if its isnt, and pick beats that sound fitting and go from there

[Tomer666]

Love it!
There's something about your flow which reminds me of Slim Shady at The Slim Shady LP ~ The Marshall Mathers LP era.

[Spyder]

thanks for the check man
songs gettin more love now than when i released it lol