Game Over [Open Verse]

[TripleNineThree]

LoF - viewtopic.php?f=38&t=149438
Song - http://soundcloud.com/tripleninethree/g ... erse-mixed

I tried to improve my rhyme scheme on this track so let me know what you guys think!!

Lyrics -
Chorus
Hey the King is coming back so it's "Game Over!"
It don't matter bout your raps nah it's "Game Over!"
You got a thousand fans to clap? It's still "Game Over!"
You say your names up on the map? Well it's "Game Over!"

Verse 1
Uh, so you got a lot of nice clothes
-You got some tight flows, you make that dice roll

You're sayin Christ's old "He don't know what I know"
Your heart is ice cold let me see the mic bro

It doesn't matter if you got fame or a big long chain that you're making it hang
You're changing the game you be claimin the king, thinkin' that Christ aint' saying a thang

Cuz your spreading your name ahead of them lames I really hope that you're ready for pain
I know someone who died for the spot, you're not a king cuz you're runnin' the block

Something your not, the Son of my God the only one that's making it rock
Your hearts gonna stop if you star in the plot I don't know who you are but He's marking His shot

-All these people thinkin' that they rhyme tough
-Well it's time up your sin is gonna find ya

And fine ya, Tell Jay he ain't Jay-hovah
-You are just a man and when you die you'll lay open

Imma stay flowin, I pray that you know Him
Cuz Christ is coming back and after that it's game over!

[mdemaz]

Insane.

I love the new rhyming scene; you sound a lot more comfortable now.

Keep them coming, brother.

[TripleNineThree]

Thanks man I really appreciate the encouragement!!!

[NoColor]

I like the drums when these lines drop "And fine ya, Tell Jay he ain't Jay-hovah
-You are just a man and when you die you'll lay open"

I love your mixing bro.
Sounds radio quality.

And I remember someone complained about your subject matter but I think we need this.

Good job!

[TripleNineThree]

Thanks man I appreciate the feedback!

And yes, a lot of people complain about my subject matter but it's all good haha, I'm glad you enjoyed it! My rhymes use to be pretty elementary so I'm thankful for the forum on holding me accountable to that, I tried to be more complex in this song.

[Eedee]

THIS!

I fucking loved your rhymes and flow on this one, dude. They were near perfection!

Mixing as always was great...

Keep this up!

[ShAdYTiLIDie]

THIS!

I fucking loved your rhymes and flow on this one, dude. They were near perfection!

Mixing as always was great...

Keep this up!

HELLLL YEAH!! this is definitely a step up from your past tracks, who made the beat ? I love it. you are definitely improving, keep it up.

[TripleNineThree]

Thanks guys I appreciate it!! And I'm not sure, I downloaded it off of soundclick. I would have to look at my studio computer to figure that out and it's currently an hour drive away from me lol

[Eedee]

Thanks guys I appreciate it!! And I'm not sure, I downloaded it off of soundclick. I would have to look at my studio computer to figure that out and it's currently an hour drive away from me lol

No problem. Think you can give feed on "Personal Army" when you have time? I just dropped it.

Btw - still looking for that mixtape feed.

[TripleNineThree]

Ha yeah man, I apologize. I've been really busy with school and music (I've performed the last couple of weekends). You should shoot me an inbox message tomorrow and remind me and I should have time tomorrow night!

[mdemaz]

Yeah, I took a break from rap for a while, but I'm getting back into it.

I'm working on some club songs; if you wanna feature on a track, you can.

Keep dropping shit, though.

I recently discovered the art of spiritual lyrics.
I love quoting ancient Egyptian text and other scriptures for dramatic effect on some of my heavier work.

Lmao, if I wrote a song about god, would you wanna do a verse on it?
It can be how the darkness of humanity can be cleared up if people were just positive instead of being misanthropic.

Even if people aren't religious, like me, it doesn't disprove the fact that they may be a divine creator or a super-intelligent race that created the universe; so, for the sake of common sense, we should all just clean up our acts.

We all need a positive message, man.

Like NoColor said, we need this.

All of this darkness has to end.

[Eedee]

^ I disagree.

This has nothing to do with the quality of the rapping/vocals/beat/mixing but his message isn't needed. That's just my view on it. We don't a jealous god coming back to wreak havoc on his creation to clean up our acts. We need to understand this is our only life we have on our only planet we're capable of inhabiting right now. We shouldn't need divine threats to clean up our fucking acts.

[mdemaz]

I think you miss-interpenetrated what I was trying to say, but I still love ya.

[Eedee]

I think you miss-interpenetrated what I was trying to say, but I still love ya.

I got what you were saying, but I was disagreeing with Triple's message. Sorry if that made it seem like I was disagreeing with you.

[mdemaz]

Maybe the purpose of a god was to not need one and be our own powerful force.

I'm just rambling now, but, oh well.