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Postby rhiannon » Jun 6th, '06, 14:24

wow i liked that...i wish i cud write stuff like that well dun lol :happy:
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Postby Tomega » Jun 6th, '06, 16:43

g_killa wrote:thanks man ...think i should make it a track?


no question, of course you should
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Postby ThomasAguanis » Jun 6th, '06, 20:36

very nice
you should def make it into a song
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Postby Lil Pimp Tell 'Em » Jun 6th, '06, 21:44

:worship: :worship: :worship: :shock: coolio awesomness :worship: :worship:
u should make tht a track :shifty: :smoking:

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Postby 4D » Jun 6th, '06, 22:17

That`s great man, you`ve always got a nice flow to your rhymes, you can tell they`d all make good audios, plus, pretty deep subject matter, PROPS! . DEfinitely make a track of it!!
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Postby $0 R3@L » Jun 6th, '06, 22:23

g_killa wrote:seems pretty cool next time thou you should put it in structure so that instead of paragraphs u got

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like that typa thin


nice ryhme other then that.
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Postby Inzanity » Jun 6th, '06, 22:57

nice shit killa keep um comin'
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Postby sinemm » Jun 11th, '06, 15:32

cool congs :)
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Postby neha » Jun 11th, '06, 15:40

I like it, good work :smoking:
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Postby sinemm » Jun 14th, '06, 17:32

thats good nice and deep and some lines are so good
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Postby sinemm » Jun 15th, '06, 09:47

hehehehe sorry i wasnt even aware of that i replied 2 times
but anyways LoL :D
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Postby DOPE » Jun 21st, '06, 17:26

verse two is sicker

i like it better tho the first one was tite aswell

make verse 3 now
"It's amazing that the amount of news that happens in the world every day always just exactly fits the newspaper."

My basic disk will make you take a razor to your wrist
Make you satanistic
Make you take the pistol to your face
N place the clip N cock it back
N let it go until your brains are rippin out your skull so bad
To sew you back would be a waste of stitches

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Postby ThomasAguanis » Jun 21st, '06, 20:06

second verse was great
how long are you planning to make this?
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Postby rhiannon » Jun 22nd, '06, 17:22

wow i really like it must hav taken u ages...deep lol :happy:
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Postby neha » Jun 23rd, '06, 08:38

That was realllll good, i loved it :smoking:
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