Heating Things Up

[Spyder]

prep you for an upcoming event, was that track supposed to be crashband but got tired of waiting lol
slightly amended.

LOF

Sinister serpent slitherin service savagin Strict sniper
Seething sage speakin, sodomized by sick Spyder.
Sorcerer scorching those who try to torch me
Jesus, transforming endorphins morphing to morphine.
Type a guy to beat you and record it for a thrill
Crazy enough to punch George Foreman in his Grill
May seem like I’m retired from the sport, aint done yet
Playin hot ‘Potato with Spyder’, come up short… Spud Web.
How he act like he great… nah, kid aint inspire me
Everything I share-noble, no, I wrote the chernobyl diaries
Now document how I mock his shit in ways prophets said
So its obvious that Tadpole aint feelin froggish yet.
You can call me a star better than bullshit dropped in a bar
Solar powered fist, to the Solarplex and caught me a Charge (damn)
I been patiently waiting for the greats to come back
Cause now theres none that, can challenge me, til then I’m done rap.
and for this final battle i wrote a hot verse, one he prolly not worth
sayin hes the champ but lets see you defend your spot first!

[Eedee]

Spyder doing a battle verse? Say it ain't so.

This was fun; had some nice punches and the rhymes were great.
The alliteration at the beginning felt a bit forced but I still liked it.

I feel like that "come up short... Spud Web" punchline is over-used as fuck. Royce used it, Ross used it... You just came up with a different way to deliver it.

Good read.

[Spyder]

honestly i knew it was overused as fuck, but i thought the Web and Spyder felt nice,
and the hot potato, Spud shit was different than its been used hahah

thanks for the feed bruv

[classthe_king]

Have you seriously not moved past this writing style?

[Spyder]

Have you seriously not moved past this writing style?

if youd read elsewhere ive had this done for around two months and was just a quick 16.

when i get around to audio i make that more meaningful other than battle verse, but even so...
plenty of rappers do all battle style verses, so what of it?

[Atone]

crazy enough to punch george forman in his grill, clever and funny, loved that line

your pieces are always great, tho, with this one, to many rhymes, i got tongue tied lol.

it was good tho, i definitly liked it

[Sam.]

Honestly, I'm not impressed one bit. Nothing that good compared to the the hype that you build. It's impressive at a certain level because it's something that you do best. It's getting saturated to see you do the same thing, the same feeling stops me from liking it.

[Spyder]

thanks for the feed guys, and yeah that was my final battle verse for a while, aside from a possible battle, but thats obvious lol

thanks for checking it out though

[Sam.]

Maybe you should do a Love song for a change. Maybe, you know..

[Spyder]

about you

and an upcoming audio collab is a bad love one lol

[Enimee]

haha couple different schemes clashing here, but its pretty repetitive, decent shit though nonethe lesss

[Sam.]

Actually, I'm writing one....after a long ass time, so.....

[EvryOnesACrtc]

This was packed with a lot of good punchlines! I haven't seen anyone write as clever as you on this forum. You've got this shit down, so I don't have any constructive criticism, really. I'll just leave you with what lines I liked the best:

Playin hot ‘Potato with Spyder’, come up short… Spud Web.
^^you really made that one you're own!

You can call me a star better than bullshit dropped in a bar
Solar powered fist, to the Solarplex and caught me a Charge (damn)
^^great wordplay

I been patiently waiting for the greats to come back
Cause now theres none that, can challenge me, til then I’m done rap.
^^fantastic braggadocio-type line

[tadpole25]

yay, my names in it.

[Spyder]

Hah thanks for the feed guys