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Geno - The Story

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Re: Geno - The Story

Postby PAINKILLƎR » Dec 31st, '12, 06:43

Holy fuck that was great. I can't really give like technical feed since I'm not experienced writer but it flowed great, and I love the concept. I enjoyed this a lot. Dope as hell Geno.
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Re: Geno - The Story

Postby Eedee » Dec 31st, '12, 08:00

You faggot, I'm using this beat for my mixtape.

Haha, nah, this was good, dude. Rhymes, as always, were great, I noticed many hidden rhyme schemes and shit. I liked it.

Flow was the best part about this. I flowed so well on it, yo. Good shit.
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Re: Geno - The Story

Postby Emadyville » Dec 31st, '12, 15:28

Uh that was real dope...not sure why but i didnt expect the ending, i was thinking just a song about this guy and then boom you were that guy, caught me off guard in a good way. i loved the whole thing from start to finish man dope piece
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Re: Geno - The Story

Postby Sam. » Dec 31st, '12, 19:21

It screams dopeness all over. Good shit.
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Re: Geno - The Story

Postby Sam. » Dec 31st, '12, 21:57

Sorry for the small feed. You know what you're capable by now, so, I kept it small.
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Re: Geno - The Story

Postby Emadyville » Jan 1st, '13, 06:54

Geno wrote:Thanks man. I kinda had the idea about some wise old man that gives advice, and how I could spin it into a story. So I gave the typical "wise old man" a back story and had the advice he gives be reflective on his life, which is why he's passing it on to the future generation so they don't make the same mistakes he did. I thought it'd be fitting to put it in a campfire / fireplace-like setting to complete the concept.


so it was kinda like the concept i gave you... :coffee:

seriously tho you killed it :worship:
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Re: Geno - The Story

Postby Gummybur » Jan 4th, '13, 15:49

Hi Genooooo I'm baaaaacckk.

And holy fuck nuggets you got a hell of a lot better.

Couldn't even believe how well that was written.
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Re: Geno - The Story

Postby Enimee » Jan 4th, '13, 21:55

this shits pretty well wrote, looks like you took time on this peice geno...

good job
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