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Bigray - Sex Slave

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Re: Bigray - Sex Slave

Postby tadpole25 » Jan 7th, '13, 00:40

Kinda like a mix of Pony by Ginuwine and Sexyback by Justin Timberlake, but with a hiphop vibe
"I take yall diss as endearment - I love it when I hear it
Maybe words offensive - free speech I don't fear it
Maybe music can take us to a place so atmospheric
Beyond our greatest imagination, illuminatin' experience
If we open our ears and close our inhibitions, it's clear"
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Re: Bigray - Sex Slave

Postby CanadaPure » Jan 12th, '13, 22:16

I didn't mind it, as in the actual structure. I understand you're trying to be versatile, but overall I felt like the content was a bit on the cornier side. Then again, that's usually how I feel about songs in this style. Overall, not my style but still not bad.
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Re: Bigray - Sex Slave

Postby Atone » Jan 14th, '13, 09:27

at first it didn't rhyme and i almosat clicked out thinkin you was trollin, i kinda wish i did click out cuz i read thru the rest and it just, didn't work man, i was not feelin it, it was corny, and sorta boring to read, plus, you added the hook or chorus into the verse and just wasted space.
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