Spelunking Forth Into The Photons - Geno, Pain, CP, Ray, ED

[CanadaPure]

Definitely felt out of my element on this. I think everyone did good though, interesting mix off all similar but different topics for sure. It's just nice to get some collabs going.

Edit: Geno, I fucked up. That should be "deceased" not diseased at the start of that one line.
Edit duex: Thanks for fixing that.

[Eedee]

I felt as if all our verses were cohesive and intertwined... that's pretty fucking cool.

I'll go in order.

bigray, some of the lines didn't even rhyme, but the content itself was there to pick up the slack. I liked the emotion. Just work on rhyming while keeping the message/emotion there and you'll be set.

CP, I loved the 'disease' line. That was clever. Good 8 bars here. Nothing bad to say about this. You're improving a lot and it's awesome to see.

Painkiller, you sent me this earlier, or at least half of it in a PM. And I said I liked it lol. The rest of it is good too. For some reason the "meant to be/cent to me" rhyme felt good to say out loud. Love it when rhymes feel that aesthetically pleasing.

Geno, good stuff certainly. You always bring your A-game to the table. Is this the same girl you were talking about in our earlier collab "Goodbye"?

[Blu]

Yeah, you all did pretty good. Unfortunately I couldn't rap along to the beat since I'm on mobile but I don't really care.

Good job guys.

[Eedee]

@Eedee - I fabricated the content of Goodbye

This is real though.

Oh...

What's real anymore...

[CanadaPure]

Well it was inspired by a real girl but I never dated a Stephanie.

Stephanie? Let's try some ecstasy.

[Eedee]

@Eedee - I fabricated the content of Goodbye

This is real though.

Oh...

What's real anymore...

Well it was inspired by a real girl but I never dated a Stephanie.

I see...

Well then...

Fuck me.

[PAINKILLƎR]

Thanks for the feed guise

but it's time to feed my dogs

Eedee - it's honestly hard to give feedback to someone that has more experience than me, so I'll just tell you that your verse was really dope and It's probably my favorite out of all of them.

Bigray - Your verse was good, I was upset that it was kinda like mine tho... wtf. Nah I'm playing but good stuff

CP - Your verse was dope man, your verse seemed the most consistently good for me (if that makes sense) awesome shit overall dawg.

Geno - It's hard to give feedback to you too since you already know, Of course you did your thing on the song and your verse complimented mine which only made it better.

Painkiller - Your a stud, and your verse was ill as fuck, especially cuz it's a tru story.

[CanadaPure]

Question for all of u?

When u guys write does it all come to you easily or do you have to keep thinking and force some of ur bars.

I only write what comes naturally. That's why I scrapped the original eight, because it was super forced. So if I can't think of anything natural, I take a break and come back to it later.

[CanadaPure]

My verse was about wanting to kill myself.

[PAINKILLƎR]

The original verse I wrote was about my computer files being corrupted so I lost all my pornos, but there is a light shone on me when I meet this dime piece that's willing to fulfill all my sexual fantasies.