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Rudimentary by Tadpole25 and Just Silver

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Rudimentary by Tadpole25 and Just Silver

Postby tadpole25 » Feb 22nd, '13, 05:58

I made my feedback in Controlling Cyphers, among others.
Just Silver's LOF

Rudimentary

Chorus
Tad and Silver, rhymes as they're meant to be
If you disagree, it's cuz ur shit's rudimentary
It's okay to stick to your dated ways
But come up to us, if you want an update

Verse 1: Just Silver
I got two i could pick either coupe
Shock you like a Pikachu
Fever hot with my team of goons
Need a roof like a couple a chains
I go hard while theyre stuck in the paint
Dried and never will change
I tried and the weather arranged
Its self, it helps to have a regular "reign"
You will melt in my lane with no shame,worthlessnes
Verses spit from eyes with versace shade purchases
Mark my words permanent you aint ever heard of this
Gerber spit,thrown up shit,got birds to flip
Not drugs, just fingers dope enough to linger
Cope with the gun slingers thats in love with English
Shown and composed im known to write different
White light type skin, light bulb type tone
Lightbulb ideas coming off my mics dome

Verse 2: Tadpole
Yeah, hey, I'm back to slay, with a new fucking rap today
Don't think I'm the fastest, eh? I'll frazier up your Cassius Clay
Till yall collapse with gashes and spit out your fuckin mouth tray
to those who hate, kids, yours skills are like rihannas tits
they're there, see, but oh so barely, yall be starvin like some ghana kids
if you pursue rap, why the fuck do that, you'll be locked and wrapped
in a hearse or a grave, while your girl's my slave
yo bitch be amazed with my cock cause when my john goes nookin'
the D she'll take will really make her mother fucking tonsils crooked
look DOG, im kidding, no bitch would have sex with you
After I blast my Tec in you, McLachlan wouldn't sit next to you
So, basically, to sum it up, bustin nuts and uppercuts
Killing pets and dealing threats, and small tittied sluts to fuck
Fuck tongue in cheek, ya'll get punched-in gut
Your rhymes of 100 takes will contain more mistakes
Than the ones I freely lay in 8 minute lunch breaks

Verse 3: Just Silver
Update ya "A" i upgrade ya
Put them in a slumped nature
The back cracked synapses
Your unflavored, im packing enough action
Havin superheroes catered to taste it
A major in the making defines defacation
Of the pacing and thoughts racing on the spot
Like it or not but believe it like Ripleys
Youll be up shits creek with me not skippin a beat
Itll be History deep when you get your defeat
Throw you down a flight of steps have your feet hittin the street
Put this on repeat, as i slows it down in slow motion
Get this fuckin track rollercoastin
Im back and im smooth as lotion
Im a known notice kill you when ive grown roses
Bitch..

Verse 4: Tadpole
Rap - infectuous disease attackin the brain
Can't adapt to the pain? go back to your cave!
Those who hate can lie flat in a grave
Remember back in the days
you cats were amazed
by a two-tape double-play track
now only the crap at the AMA's
and at last, i've come to rage
I'll put the gun away, a one plus eight
I'll come on stage, spray the parade
and watch em all run away
"I take yall diss as endearment - I love it when I hear it
Maybe words offensive - free speech I don't fear it
Maybe music can take us to a place so atmospheric
Beyond our greatest imagination, illuminatin' experience
If we open our ears and close our inhibitions, it's clear"
- Tadpole
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Re: Rudimentary by Tadpole25 and Just Silver

Postby Just Silver » Feb 22nd, '13, 14:37

i think this is slept on its unique its out of place but i like it
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Re: Rudimentary by Tadpole25 and Just Silver

Postby Just Silver » Feb 22nd, '13, 14:58

thanks for the feed guy
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Re: Rudimentary by Tadpole25 and Just Silver

Postby J.R. » Feb 22nd, '13, 20:34

I liked this, it flowed nice, and Just Silver beat you a bit Tad, but you did alright as well.


However, for both of you, MULTIES! Need more of em.

Like this line,

I go hard while theyre stuck in the paint
Dried and never will change

Could be re-worked for more syllables;

I go hard while theyre stuck in the paint
Dried and won't fuckin' change.
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Re: Rudimentary by Tadpole25 and Just Silver

Postby Just Silver » Feb 22nd, '13, 20:39

J.R. wrote:I liked this, it flowed nice, and Just Silver beat you a bit Tad, but you did alright as well.


However, for both of you, MULTIES! Need more of em.

Like this line,

I go hard while theyre stuck in the paint
Dried and never will change

Could be re-worked for more syllables;

I go hard while theyre stuck in the paint
Dried and won't fuckin' change.

thanks for the feed :smoking: i have been messin with unique flows
and switchin multis on the spot
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Re: Rudimentary by Tadpole25 and Just Silver

Postby Strictt Ame » Feb 22nd, '13, 20:49

Not a bad read..I think Tads first verse was the best verse..overall it was solid (pause) couple good hittin lines, the flow was a bit choppy to me but I dont know how yall were actually spittin it..need to hear it on a beat for that..but good job, yall stay elevatin
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Re: Rudimentary by Tadpole25 and Just Silver

Postby Just Silver » Feb 22nd, '13, 20:51

thanks broski more collabs and pieces on the way
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Re: Rudimentary by Tadpole25 and Just Silver

Postby Just Silver » Feb 22nd, '13, 22:18

I cant copy n paste :/

i fed Strictt Ame - untitled
recently idk about TP
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Re: Rudimentary by Tadpole25 and Just Silver

Postby tadpole25 » Feb 22nd, '13, 23:26

as i said above, heres my ref
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"I take yall diss as endearment - I love it when I hear it
Maybe words offensive - free speech I don't fear it
Maybe music can take us to a place so atmospheric
Beyond our greatest imagination, illuminatin' experience
If we open our ears and close our inhibitions, it's clear"
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Re: Rudimentary by Tadpole25 and Just Silver

Postby Just Silver » Feb 23rd, '13, 01:26

do we get feed now :( lol
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