Rap for my mate!

[Tomega]

Yo! this is a story for a friend of mine who must leave this country for being illegal here.

Yo Dali,
This is to you
We met for the first time in the first class
Every break we were talking on the wall on the grass
I foun out you liked Eminem too
So rapping was no longer a taboo
You were hardly speaking Dutch, You were here only for a year
But when you had to move to an other town, I jerked a lil tear
never sure of allowed to stay in this state
You survived all anger and hate
you lived from day to tday
And what more can i say
My respect for you has grown
Remember the time we were looking out the window
The whole world was white, full of snow
rapping "lose yourself" cause we saw Em's 8mile video
So even if we dont live in the same city
we never get seperated, and u know whats shitty?
u moved again, things became different
Your grandfather died, and you weren't able to be there
Even if u have no money you're always able to share
Shady kept us together
that's why i never forget u forever.
you are here for 5 years now and ur very clever
Going to get your diploma's. It's now or never...
Im rhyming from my heart
Cause even a 1000 miles cant hold as apart.

You learnt me much about the streets
and how to travel for free
And not to pay to much
Im on the greatest holidays
When ur sitting home watching tv
Well finally in 2003
Eminem came to Amsterdam, that's some history
You hooked me up with a hot chick
Damn, you did so much to me
Now it's 2005
And you still dont know if you gonna stay
Damn, government, I would kill u for my mate
My other friends dont know shit about trouble
They dont have any, the got the money 4 times double
And still they have less to offer
So i hope Dali, u dont have to suffer
Cause this shit is taking to long
C'mon man, Keep Up! Be strong!

[HAYZI]

that was nice man very touchin hope your friend stays

[eminemcaparica]

:cry: man that's sad... really sad.
i hope you and your homie stay togheter 4 all life man, propz

[AspirinE]

Nice lines

if i could suggest something

id suggest mor wordplay

[Tomega]

Nice lines

if i could suggest something

id suggest mor wordplay

Im not english

[B.A.D.]

what aspirine said....

yo I liked that deep shit, fa real

but yo need to fix ur flow... u barely had some
vocab is very important, try to match structure


*tip*
try have the same silables per line, not exactly but make sure they flow

[Sunni]

That was good man. Keep em up.

[Tomega]

what aspirine said....

yo I liked that deep shit, fa real

but yo need to fix ur flow... u barely had some
vocab is very important, try to match structure


*tip*
try have the same silables per line, not exactly but make sure they flow

Very useful tip. I notice that myself too sometimes. Writing is not a problem for me, but bring the flow in is a hard job.. My limited knowledge of words is a reason..