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Geno - Come So Far

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Re: Geno - Come So Far

Postby Sam. » Jun 18th, '13, 20:02

This is something different and exactly what I needed to see. You seem pissed and it was clearly visible at times. At a point I felt you'd go soft on her but no, you went all out. The fist swinging...join in line conveyed a lot of things as far the main feeling in this verse is concerned, at least for me. Nice use of Multi and Beat to make up for the long bars. Flow was exelantooooo! The 2nd Verse/Hook was really poetic and is something I havent seen from you in a long time. Keep it up. I also like how you made this sound dramatic, that's really good.
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Re: Geno - Come So Far

Postby Steve Spag » Jun 18th, '13, 20:55

Haha, sounded so awesome the way I flowed it to the beat. Reminded me of some young "fuck the world" Eminem type shit. Funny yet serious. Dope.
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Re: Geno - Come So Far

Postby Just Silver » Jun 21st, '13, 01:30

Its pretty nice the first few lines for more were hard to flow but it got easier

Content is decent and i could feel the emotion thats great and the only thing that i was confused by was
: " Fuck you, you wanna come through and act like I'm some
gay dude who'd never want a crack at that?
..I'd smash your ass fast with a magnum pack, saranwrap's
your mask 'til your back detached (ughh!!)"

Does that mean sex or violence since smash could mean both and so could magnum pack loll

I loved the phrasing good stuff overall
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Re: Geno - Come So Far

Postby Arrinef » Jun 21st, '13, 01:44

dude this shit is nuts, love the intensity. I could tell either you ate too much hot sauce when you wrote this, or you hulked out man :b:

".Well I hope you get back with your old drunk boyfriend so he can knock you the fuck out,
..And when you stumble drunk into your slumber hun, I'll be so long gone when you come out,
"

i've had those moments man,
my van is crazy but im sure yours is cold like a mother fucker geno loaded with pills :y:
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