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I'm Spyder Man

Postby Spyder » Jul 1st, '13, 21:34

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Spat from the belly of the beast look how I've ended up,
Recalibrate Medusa's optics, turned gargoyles to flesh and blood.
White wine dining aside your grave while your bitch hold the roses
Cause testin me will have you 'die in vein' like Dracula overdosin!
Rip and maim, fitted gets a stain from your splintered brain
Came in 'tailor-made and well suited' for a "fit of rage."
Text annex special shit, I said my text a next special hit
No, it'll break brain stems, my text a neck specialist.
You’ll never even the odds, the reason you believe in God
Fuck second chances opportunity and I have a secret knock
Handle me? please, like a Jigsaw victim you get 'handed da-feet'
Its Hell for me cause I’m mentally fucked, split personality argued my insanity plea
Told the Graeae Sisters, bitches it’s an eye for an eye
My own worst enemy, I guess this is Spy versus Spy
Wrote me off, looks like we got a little violence on our hands
Slit the throat of these friggin GOATs, turned it to Silence of the Lambs.


These other cats bore me tracks corny bunch of sad sacks mourning
Fuck your past I'll play your spinal discs if I want your back-story
Beast be unbeatable, show his teeth venom leak and seepin through
Feel the heat see the steam it was nothing for me to Ether you.
Either you changed degrees of human being, wolf from bein sheepish dude
But give me excuse I’ll see it you be eating through a feeding tube.
I’m mean muggin, D. Ludgren's clean punches, Parker in this place
Only right I 'be buggin' 'fin to freak sumin free runnin, parkourin this place.
This just the 'casualties of the catalyst', attackin me? Who’d wanna battle this?
Y’all packin "casual-tees" while I pack a vest, hit list of the beef I call a 'cattle-list'
Make these rappers levitate like tractor beams these fiends just a sack of shit
I'm the one who took something 'Just Silver to gold' like an alchemist!
Act like he control the game with wizard staff but you still a flamer
Wait until I rip his ass served but it isn’t catered ill kill a player.
Skip your tracks, laid out in an instant flat burnt crisp and black in the incinerator
Somebody tell Mr.DGAF I’m comin for that ‘silver-back like a gorilla tamer’.


no shot at Just Silver :b:
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Re: I'm Spyder Man

Postby Spyder » Jul 1st, '13, 21:49

to whom... that was actually just a punch i liked. the rest of that verse essentially is an obvious shot, as a healthy feud though ;)
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Re: I'm Spyder Man

Postby Spyder » Jul 1st, '13, 22:43

nah just thought of that on the fly, but put it with that verse cause it sounds like a diss lol
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Re: I'm Spyder Man

Postby PAINKILLƎR » Jul 2nd, '13, 01:08

Pretty dope man, lots of clever and lethal lines. Rhyming was really good like always. Some lines I didn't get, not that they were bad it's just I don't get the reference, nahmsayin?

I liked that last line with the silver-back gorilla play. haha


"These other cats bore me tracks corny bunch of sad sacks mourning
Fuck your past I'll play your spinal discs if I want your back-story "

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Dang fam, offense taken. But naw line was ill bruh.

Great drop.
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Re: I'm Spyder Man

Postby Spyder » Jul 2nd, '13, 01:31

Haha thanks fam
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Re: I'm Spyder Man

Postby Mr.DGAF » Jul 2nd, '13, 02:25

Haha this was nice. Good shit bruh.
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How many truths you can hide in flows

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Re: I'm Spyder Man

Postby Spyder » Jul 2nd, '13, 02:58

when we gonna go a second round
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Re: I'm Spyder Man

Postby Mr.DGAF » Jul 2nd, '13, 03:11

I'm down whenever. Just putting something together as a little response but I got time man. After I drop tonight we can set something up.
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Re: I'm Spyder Man

Postby Just Silver » Jul 2nd, '13, 03:39

Definitely gotta read again i see the friendly fire lol and ill be able to give feed in a bit
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Re: I'm Spyder Man

Postby 12characters » Jul 2nd, '13, 03:48

I'm not Spiderman. I'm Spyder, maaaan.
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Re: I'm Spyder Man

Postby Just Silver » Jul 2nd, '13, 04:44

I found the flow was off at times to fit punches some worked some didn't

Came in 'tailor-made and well suited' for a "fit of
rage."

I liked that line in particular

And the second stream of bars were hidden shots lol :o

Also felt some punches are complex to the point you need to examine it more
Not that its a bad thing but for beginners its hard to grasp the gargoyle line etc

Overall real nice shit and maybe shits goin down if u know what i mean lol ;)
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Re: I'm Spyder Man

Postby Spyder » Jul 2nd, '13, 05:47

Oh me and dgaf gone get something poppin
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Re: I'm Spyder Man

Postby Mr.DGAF » Jul 2nd, '13, 05:48

:y: should be dropping soon here. Can't lie though that spinal disc punch was nice.
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Re: I'm Spyder Man

Postby Spyder » Jul 2nd, '13, 05:53

I like the 'text a neck specialist' triple breakdown.
And the Dracula line

Interested on where u at on your punch game brah
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Re: I'm Spyder Man

Postby Eedee » Jul 3rd, '13, 05:37

Lol this was pretty good, Spyder. You had some nice ass punches in there. Although at points, it just feels like you're trying too hard to make punches out of things. But when you execute them, you fucking murder it haha

So you and DGAF are doing the card?
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