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High Tolerance

Postby Just Silver » Jul 15th, '13, 05:08

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Note: i was on alotta shit :b: and keystyle btw
:smoking: When I'm high I'm sober to the public
before i die i hope that i can overcome it
Cause if i, keep on going how I'm dosing
Its not a good road to be coasting
Probably hit a fucking guardrail into the ocean
Oh my god now my heart stays without motion
Fall apart piece by piece yet stay focused
Life is analyzed in my death at the moment
Stand for trial in which the pills that i toiled with
Which makes me write all these premonitions
Ive been the sickest hypnotist futuristic shit
Sending victims like myself to get chewed and spit
Pills popped piff puffed want recovery
Not the shitty album it's the drugs in me
Still not the same never be where my brother be
In the higher placement, with the higher payments
I'm just a higher patient Dr. No patience
Higher than a crooked cop on probation
I'm just saying i need to put my life ahead
As if my lifes the everlasting trend till my end
But these drugs get me by on a rough ride
Yet the high makes me realize peace with a third eye
So i sit and blurt rhymes, ill sober up sometime
Next day subsides, i guess ill get numb high
From sun down to sunrise i come around with lungs dry
Smoke from the plant that's illegal cause of some guy
Ill leave u with a dumb rhyme I'm losing my mind
I took 7 almost took nine my eyes red as rib prime
Ill sober up one day but i think it's time to get mine
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Re: High Tolerance

Postby PAINKILLƎR » Jul 15th, '13, 05:33

Good keystyle, although I felt it ended pretty weak it felt lazy. But the rhyming is good, flowed well, some clever lines, concept wise it's pretty bland since your topics continuously involve being under the influence and tend to have the underdog feel to them. Not that it's bad, it gets old though. It was a nice piece though.
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Re: High Tolerance

Postby Just Silver » Jul 15th, '13, 05:54

PAINKILLƎR wrote:Good keystyle, although I felt it ended pretty weak it felt lazy. But the rhyming is good, flowed well, some clever lines, concept wise it's pretty bland since your topics continuously involve being under the influence and tend to have the underdog feel to them. Not that it's bad, it gets old though. It was a nice piece though.

I know what u mean im trying to go for some fantasy shit next time

:b: Lol it's just to get the creativity pumping
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Re: High Tolerance

Postby Just Silver » Jul 16th, '13, 17:00

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Re: High Tolerance

Postby Sam. » Jul 17th, '13, 20:57

It seems when you keystyle you're actually maintaining the technicalities of writing lmao. This was really decent drop.
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Re: High Tolerance

Postby Just Silver » Jul 17th, '13, 20:59

Thanks guy :y:
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Re: High Tolerance

Postby Just Silver » Jul 25th, '13, 19:34

last bump gonna up the writing back to the Vita
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