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[Just Silver]

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Shout out to Diaze I realize we need that heat back
Real eyes will make the feed back spittin like a speed bag
Back n fourth like freeze tag shout to pain k
Guess we went our seperate ways
Used to write like everyday turned into weekly
Punches got cheesy wordplay stale as chips
I'm just trying to stay writing and anchored in
Broke like a angled chin I'm just settling with it
Writing till ive severed skin and have several wins
My hands all blood from choking that based fuck
Until heaven im in it that last sin I made up
Forgive me god but Im blasting everlasting
Till every last bitch fuck gets a nip tuck
That's what I wish to become
Slit to the lungs of a based young kid
Making fake assumptions knives placed in ya stomach
Like your a damn magician I'm the head on collision
Better use insurance money back instead of dissing
Shits a walk in the picnic you ants aint sure to be living
When I step on your ant hill put you at a standstill
Any man can get killed free of will
I'm free of wills so if I die sorry for my offspring
Profit was never brought up life is what it's costing

[enjinn]

awesome verse

[Just Silver]

Thanks guy

This is too short to use for feed back though

[enjinn]

well...i thought it flowed well...i liked the lyrics...its good

[Just Silver]

Thanks guy ill feed u soon

[Just Silver]

Bump

[sneakerheadshady]

fucking GOAT. no kidding its one of your best verses. flow is good as always, nice multis.
1. nice diaze s/o
2. pain line was cool.
3. tuck everlasting line was sick as fuck because some people won't catch that.
4. i love how it doesn't technically have a topic, but it feels like it does.
sick man

[SpiderDiaze]

nice rhymes their bro, we need a collab together.

[Just Silver]

Thanks guy and definitely need a collab with both of u soon

Either one big project or seperate

[sneakerheadshady]

Big project nigga, pm me whenever

[PAINKILLƎR]

Whew that s/o, thanks brother. Shit was nice, got some dope rhymes in there. The flow was really bumpy for me at first had to go over it again to get down, but it alright. I thought those last 4 lines were pretty good. Only thing is I think you need to step that vocabulary up, and I don't mean just use big, uncommon words. I mean like use words that phrase what your saying more vividly, paint pictures better for the reader/listener.

Good drop though bruh.

[Just Silver]

Thanks and yea I know what u mean

[Just Silver]

Bump then New project