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Regular Girlfriend

Postby Rae » Aug 15th, '06, 15:42

How much I wanna be a regular girlfriend,
Wow - what can I say,
Its sumthing that I've dream't about every since our first couple days,
But its not possible becuz you live so far away,
So we're stuck in a long distant relationship with no say,
I wish I could change it so I could see you everyday,
I can see it now ... me sneakin off in the middle of the day,
Just so I can see your cute face,
And most of all I wanna hear you sing,
And I know later in life you'll be make alot of bling-bling,
i've never been more sure of anything in my life,
Becuz I've made it up in my mind "I wanna be your wife",
Baby I love you so much I wanna be with you for the rest of my life!


i tried to make it flow and rhyme but that didnt work out to well. but ahh feedback would be nice. :D
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Postby Rae » Aug 15th, '06, 18:09

feed back would be nice ... do u think i should send it to my longdistant boyfriend (is it good enough 2 send to my bf)?
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Postby Coccoa » Aug 15th, '06, 18:20

If he's like me he wont like it. Write sumthin about bitches and guns.
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Postby Rae » Aug 15th, '06, 18:23

ugh ur mean. lol. well i dont wanna write about that b/c thats what everyone else writes about! (just like what DMX was sayin ... write about stuff that matters)
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Postby beccababe2 » Aug 15th, '06, 18:24

I'm sure he'd like it, when i write stuff for my boyfriend he thinks it's sweet, and u rhyme a lot betta than me so i'd send it to him so he knows ur thinkin about em u know' ;)
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Postby Coccoa » Aug 15th, '06, 18:24

Exactly, i write about stuff that matters. Bitches, hoes, putas, sluts.
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Postby Rae » Aug 15th, '06, 18:33

thank you beccababe2 ... for the real feedback! unlike coccoa that keeps agruing with me ...

coccoa i just want feedback ... and u gave that 2 me "bitches and guns" i get it ... thanx 4 tha feedback ... now u can stop postin stuff!
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Postby Coccoa » Aug 15th, '06, 18:39

Okay.

More bitches plz.
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Postby Rae » Aug 15th, '06, 18:42

aww thank you. (i hate the word bling-bling 2 but bling-bling sounded the best) :)
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Postby yoshi » Aug 15th, '06, 18:43

that's really nice.. i mean writing a poem to your bf :happy: and yeah, i think it's good, i hope he's gonna like it :happy:
Maybe wrote:I'm so awesome, I don't mind looking desperate.

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Postby Rae » Aug 15th, '06, 18:45

thank you ... :) i hope he will like it ... but he is really hard only people when they write stuff b/c he says hes a "hard core juggalo" (yuck) ... but i love him lol
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Postby Coccoa » Aug 15th, '06, 19:02

Sounds like a hard core asshole to me.

He cracker right?
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Postby die2nite » Aug 15th, '06, 19:05

The rhymes might not be top-notch but it's got a hell of a lot of passion and meaning. Besides it seems like more of a poem so it doesn't need deep rhymes.

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Postby Shadyluva » Aug 15th, '06, 19:07

AWW....ii THiiNK HE'LL LiiKE iiT....SOUNDS LiiKE THE PPL ON TR R iiN A VERY LOVEABLE MOOD :happy:

ii NO iiF ii WROTE MY BOYFRiiEND SUMTHiiN LiiKE DiiS....HE WUD LiiKE iiT... :wub:
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Postby die2nite » Aug 15th, '06, 19:09

Shadyluva wrote:AWW....ii THiiNK HE'LL LiiKE iiT....SOUNDS LiiKE THE PPL ON TR R iiN A VERY LOVEABLE MOOD :happy:

ii NO iiF ii WROTE MY BOYFRiiEND SUMTHiiN LiiKE DiiS....HE WUD LiiKE iiT... :wub:

Not too hijack the thread but do you have OCD?
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