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Postby .Giorgo. » Aug 18th, '06, 17:36

I'm a coward. Rhyme.

A regular schoolday, you came to me,
You asked it,, but i wen't agree,

I never should do that, i didn't love her,
That ons thing, i was sure,

But i've said yes, i didn't want to heart her,
But i said yes, the bieggest mistake ever,

I've did one year like i was in love,
Cause i get an advice, it was from a man above,

I broke it up, i've said it in her face,
She said : am i just a replace?

She wasn't a replace, i was just a coward that said yes,
Common' i didn't know her adress,

A week later i came on school, i've noticed that she cuts herself,
I was worried, i hope that she doesn't try to kill herself,

When i was going home, i was on my bike, i saw something in the river,
It was her, i never could forgive me this,

My whole life was messed up, why i did it ?
I think that i just was a snitch,

I would never be able to firgive this,,
I messed up someones life,, and here parents, i've gaved them a big kiss,

,,, Goodye, Rip, i'm sorry,,
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Aug 18th, '06, 17:40

wow man thats really deap nice though good work
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Postby Lil Pimp Tell 'Em » Aug 18th, '06, 17:51

:sweating: some of it dont make sense, but ull learn good english if you stick around :smoking:

anyway, it was good, just had some grammar mistakes, but beside that nice job :happy:
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Postby Rae » Aug 18th, '06, 17:53

Aww ... that was sad! but i really liked it! see u keep gettin better! keep it up !!! :d
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Postby .Giorgo. » Aug 18th, '06, 18:00

thx for the credits, everyone. yeah i know. My english is not that good.
But yeah, i hope that it gets better :).

Thx Bar, Lil' Pimp and MarshellBM :). :flower: .
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