Your Fault

[Rae]

sometimes i just dunno what to do,
just left without a clue,
and its sad,
becuz you know how i feel,
baby- whats your deal,
do you enjoy seeing me in pain,
i know this game,
i've played it before,
and im not going to lose,
im gonna even tha score,
its funny at the beginnin of our relationship everything was great,
i thought it would last forever,
but i guess not,
becuz overtime someone found that lever,
tha lever we hid away,
the lever that says "you lose",
so now all we can do is say our bo-whoos,
becuz your just not there,
truthfully i dunno what happened,
the lasttime i checked,
everything was great,
but you have your reasons and i have mine,
my choice is to find someone better,
im up-in my standards,
i dont need you anymore,
i promise,
im ready to move on.

[C-Game]

nice moving one ... did it happen in real life bro
i liked it ... keep it up
i thought of addin 12 lines for it ......
here goes

Its been days, countless hours, im feeling so SOUR
im tempted to call you back but my pride over POWERS
my battered feelings , ur the reason ur the MEDICINE
i have seen people eat dirth , but i have NEVER SEEN
myself in front of the mirror filled with years of TEARS
eyes are bright red filled with hatred , love and FEAR
im drenched from loneliness im drowned by DARKNESS
the precious moments were hyped but now my life is SPARKLESS
maybe i was caught in the moment and said some WORDS
like "upin my standards" girl you are the WORLD
i cldnt differenciate your CONS from all your PROS
all i know is my life changed when u walk out that DOOR

[Rae]

nice moving one ... did it happen in real life bro
i liked it ... keep it up
i thought of addin 12 lines for it ......
here goes

Its been days, countless hours, im feeling so SOUR
im tempted to call you back but my pride over POWERS
my battered feelings , ur the reason ur the MEDICINE
i have seen people eat dirth , but i have NEVER SEEN
myself in front of the mirror filled with years of TEARS
eyes are bright red filled with hatred , love and FEAR
im drenched from loneliness im drowned by DARKNESS
the precious moments were hyped but now my life is SPARKLESS
maybe i was caught in the moment and said some WORDS
like "upin my standards" girl you are the WORLD
i cldnt differenciate your CONS from all your PROS
all i know is my life changed when u walk out that DOOR

wow that was great! ...


yeah this is happenin right now ... i write stuff like this everytime i get mad @ my boyfriend. (like the song i wrote "so be it" i posted it a couple days ago) ... but yeah ... my boyfriend is blockin me out ... and we only talk like every 2weeks ... i just dunno whats goin on ... but im tryin 2 move on ... but everytime i make up my mind to leave him ... he pulls me back in ... its complicating. but anyways thanx 4 tha feedback!

[C-Game]

thanks hey im sorry i thought u were a guy
keep it up girl

[Rae]

lol its ok ... everyone thinks ima guy ... (i am tryin 2 change my username ... but admin. wont answer my request! ) but yeah ... thanx i will ... i try 2 write sumthin everyday! (hints try)

[stevethetruth]

damn damn damn DAMN!!!!

that was wicked good and i mean it!
keep it up
i love reading the stuff you write

[,-,'-{Bar}-',-,]

great work by both of yous but rae you need to start working on yer structure trying to make your ryhtms more complex now coz you got the stuff to rap about and you can do the rythming fine i shouldnt really say it coz i aint all that complex myself but lol anywae... PM asp for the name change he shoudl replie well nice work again

[Rae]

thanks for the feedback u guys! and i understand what ur sayin bar (now that steve explained it 2 me lol) and thanx 4 sayin that!

[C-Game]

rae u got it girl
hey lets do a duet
wat do u say
u think of the theme and make sure its something got to do with a girl and guy
post it under the name Duet of XXXXXXX
XXXXX cld be the topic
u start i will respond
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