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KIM ( my version ) i wrote to a friend of mine

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KIM ( my version ) i wrote to a friend of mine

Postby C-Game » Aug 23rd, '06, 20:10

Kim- my version i wrote to a friend of mine named frank who wanted to diss his wife for fun
actually he wanted to record it but he cldnt rap
and his wife found this funny as well
well the simple letters are the wife
BLOCK LETTERS IS FRANK


(bye hunny i love u be rite back in 5 mins cya
WHERE U GOIN ( to meet nasee she is sustained with paraplegia )
OHH UR SEEIN THAT FUCKIN LAWYER U WANNA SUE ME
I SAID SIT DOWN BITCH ( nooo oh please)
U WANNA IGNORE ME I NEVER SHLD HV TRUST U
HOW CLD U DO THIS U CLD AND SHLD THINK ABT US 2
NOW U WANNA GO HOME AND SAY I DIDNT LOVE U
AND MARRY THE OTHER GUY ( stop ) FUCK U
( baby calM down u know theres only one man i love
frank pls i said calm down put that thing down
y do u alwways jump in to a conclusion )
LET GO OF MY HAND BITH I'M DONE WITH UR ILLSUIONS
NOW U WANNA CALM ME SAYIN " FRANK I'M SORRY "
OH MY GOD I'M BREAKIN ( frank i .. ) SHUT UR STORY
I SAID IT BITCH GO CHANGE UR SELF GET ME LUNCH
DONT MAKE ME SAY IT AGAIN ( we hd this conversation once)
(mom was rite abt u) GET BACK HERE U RUNNIN
I SAID GET BACK HERE BITCH , WHO THE F*** U BE F***IN
OH YEAH UR SWEATIN AND UR TREMBLIN ITS ME HONEY I'M CALMED DOWN
( wats behind ur back ) THIS ONE ( put ur gun down)
SO ITS A F***IN NIGHTMARE AND U AWARE AND UR SCARED TO DEATH
HOW FUNNY BITCH WAT KEPT U THT DAY I SAID CONFESS
(baby i told ya the traffic ) BULLSHIT U BITCH DONT LIE TO Mayyy
THANK GOD WE AINT PARENTS COZ THEY R GONNA LOSE THEIR MOM TODAY


no poetic laws here i just wrote it for fun.. i hv written another 2 verses but only posted this
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Postby Rae » Aug 23rd, '06, 21:26

ahh its cool (good) and i know excatly what your tryin to make it ... b/c i listen to the song Kim all the time

but it is a little hard to read (that may just be me)

but it was good! keep it up :)
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Aug 23rd, '06, 21:30

man ill structure dont used words like cdnt or shld when rapping write them out FULLY Couldn't should you know but its a nice rap
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Postby C-Game » Aug 24th, '06, 16:42

yea bar
ill make it like that
thnkx for the feed back
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Postby DOPE » Aug 24th, '06, 17:45

this just reminded me of that song man

the songs hook is OFF THE HOOK

aite so on topic now, its good not the Kim song but this what you wrote is good

but this dont mean that the Kim song aint good
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