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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Aug 23rd, '06, 22:21

ok ok

im doing this rythm coz one day i shall shine
and when a do everyone gonni know its ma time
but to do that imma start upping ma game
so far ma lyrics are nice but sorta plain
ok here i go lets hope i dont end in shame

ok time for me to, Hit-the-Track
dunno what to say, you Shit-Yeh-crap
do-what-the-fuck-you-can
you-caught-yeh-suck-to-scam
you cant handle the plan
fuck me and ill fuck-up-yer-man
just like when a stuck-up-yer-man
fuck with me and youll be Getting-a-ban
them ma man will be letting-a-bang
if you don understand ma lyrics dont worry-about-it
coz im just precticing right now there no hurry-about-it

ok id aprreciate feedback first time trying to use multis and that.....i know it aint great......if you got problem getting ti to make sense quote the lin and ill explain coz i know that ya'll might not know what

suck-to-scam


means......its jsut that you suck at scamming ( scamming is a version of hustlin )

anywae please feedback coz i wanne know if im goin about upping my lyrics the right way or if i done any good here :D

thx :D
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Aug 24th, '06, 00:09

anyone giving feedback ?
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Postby ThomasAguanis » Aug 24th, '06, 00:26

it's great you're trying to use multis now.
just keep working with them and you'll get a hang of them and make them more complex and everything.

hmm maybe we should make a multi thread or something where someone does a line and then the next person continues it using the last word/words from the line above and makes it a multi. then finishes the line and makes a new multi at the end. hmm maybe that would work :-k
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Aug 24th, '06, 00:29

that sounds pretty good infact i could use the practise :D and thx for the feedback really appreciate it :D
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Postby Rae » Aug 24th, '06, 14:35

i like it 2 :D wow ur gettin really good! :D
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Postby stevethetruth » Aug 24th, '06, 14:45

Rae wrote:i like it 2 :D wow ur gettin really good! :D


yep he's getting better than me :D :D
and btw that shit you just did bar is fucking hard
keep it up :worship:
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Aug 24th, '06, 14:54

steverocks88 wrote:
Rae wrote:i like it 2 :D wow ur gettin really good! :D


yep he's getting better than me :D :D
and btw that shit you just did bar is fucking hard
keep it up :worship:


yeh its solid n thx guys n gals :D
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Aug 25th, '06, 13:41

bump any more feed ?
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