Ellie Bellie

by **Rae** » Aug 30th, '06, 20:09

i babysit my lil cousin Ellie twice a week,
i love this little girl to death,
even tho sometimes i fret,
she is a bundle of joy,
even when she plays with her toys,
i bet your think-ok who cares,
i do- shes as cute as a lil teddy bear,
i treat her like shes my own,
i love everything about her,
i love her every single bone,
its so adorable when she smiles,
you can see it from miles and miles,
she has gorgious gold hair,
and it goes hand and hand with her smart head,
at first i thought she wouldnt like me,
but now i think shes better,
than i ever thought a baby could be,
Ellie makes me realize that i do want a baby,
of my own someday,
hopefully my baby will be a perfect angel,
just like my one and only lil Ellie Bellie

by **,-,'-{Bar}-',-,** » Aug 30th, '06, 20:21

thats sweet man :d i got a little nephew and i love him with my life....nice rythms rae

by **Rae** » Aug 30th, '06, 21:04

awww thanx!

by **C-Game** » Aug 30th, '06, 21:06

ellie jellie reminded me of smelly jelly
only rhymewise

hey rae ur rhymes are gettin longer and well structured
and the way u maintain the story is nice
keep it up

when i read a rhyme from rae
it will brighten up my day

by **Rae** » Aug 30th, '06, 22:09

lmao ...

thanx 4 tha feedback! and im glad u liked it!

(im glad bar liked it 2

)

"when i read a hyme from rae
it will brighten up my day"

i like that lol ...

by **.Giorgo.** » Aug 30th, '06, 22:20

I like it too :'(

. So many feelings.

Hey, about that baby. I can give u one ^^.
No, the poem is really nice, some deep rhymes in it.
Your rhymes gettin' better Rae. Keep postin'

by **Rae** » Aug 30th, '06, 22:24

lol

(i dont wanna baby 4 about 10 years ... but thanx lmao :laughing:

) ...
thanx! im tryin ... and i will def. keep postin!!!

by **stevethetruth** » Aug 31st, '06, 02:19

what you talking about lol it's wicked good
there's some rhymes i never would have thoiught of like owns, bones
never would have thought of that for real

keep it up rae!!!

by **sinemm** » Aug 31st, '06, 09:56

that sounds really sweet cuz its true and it makes your rhymes nicer..

by **Rae** » Aug 31st, '06, 20:17

Thanks 4 tha feedback!!! :d :d

by **Tomega** » Aug 31st, '06, 20:34

is this a case of child porn?

by **stevethetruth** » Aug 31st, '06, 20:36

Tomega wrote:is this a case of child porn?

ummmmm very random ass post (SPAMMER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!)

by **Tomega** » Aug 31st, '06, 21:07

steverocks88 wrote:
Tomega wrote:is this a case of child porn?

ummmmm very random ass post (SPAMMER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!)

you could prevent spamming yourself with not react on my post

Btw: i like the stuff you wrote RAE, i think its too bad not every line rhymes
if you write something in the future just post it..

by **Rae** » Aug 31st, '06, 21:20

well some stuff i couldnt get to rhyme. and i wanted it to make sense and be true @ the same time. so thats what i ended up with. because at this point in my life ellie is very important to me ... so i wrote about her and printed it 4 her ... so when she can read then she can read it and know that i love her! ...

even tho it doesnt rhyme it still serves its purpose!

by **slim1** » Sep 4th, '06, 20:10

hey thats really good keep going make more

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