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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Sep 4th, '06, 17:27

i just clicked on whats happening to me,
so im giving you this keystyle for free,
ive been like every normal person in life,
i want to be a superhero , then lose the drive ,
i want to be a game desinger , then lose thrive,
so thats what the lord is hitting me with now ,
testing my courage and strength to stick till the end ,
a think he thinking that a been drinking and dont mean what i say ,
well im telling you now lord, im making it as a rapper if it takes my last breath ok ,
the last 3 days i got hit with hurdle after hurdle ,
getting ma writers block nealry losing ma drive,
the girl that i once loved coming back to ma life,
them my mic went bust im like what the fuck,
what the fucks happening this sucks,
steve dont know how much he helps me,
it was reading his lyrics that made me relise this,
im telling this straight im not taking the piss ,
i think a feel ma flow coming back,
ma writing starting to stop being wack,
fuck im enjoying wrighting this crap ,
b-b-b-b-b-b-b BARS BACK ,

lol had to do the bit at the end lol

please elave feedback :D
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Postby Rae » Sep 4th, '06, 17:33

i like it! (and the end was great!) :D

keep it up :D (since u always say that 2 me ... i wanna say it back lol) :D
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Postby ThomasAguanis » Sep 4th, '06, 17:37

nice job.
you're improving a lot. keep it up
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Postby ,-,'-{Bar}-',-, » Sep 4th, '06, 20:19

thx for both os your feedbacks :d appreciated
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