Short Rhyme Written in class, should i continue it?

[Infliction]

Hey guys, havnt posted in awhile, i just wrote this in class today, tell me if u like it and if i should encorporate it into or build on to full song. here it is



I know exactly where im headed, hell or jail
Don't know which yet, but I'm tippin' the scales,
Fuck it, give me a coin man, heads or tails
Prison? Aight, Kill a man, get life and no bail
This shit I'm spewin' takes you to a whole new dimension
Spit rhymes that send you in the wrong direction,
These rhymes are like a play, and Im directin'
I'll take a living humans body and commence disectin',
Cut you up real nice, like a fuckin' C-Section
Yall wanna stop violence around the world, but what the fuck you expectin?
You say you want no war, but look at the president you electin'
I'll say it straight up right now, FUCK BUSH, Look
I aint afraid to spit my mind, it keeps me stress free
So next time you see me, dont hold back, tell me what's on ya mind B

[soperman005]

hey i like it.. i dont agree with the fuck bush statement but i think u cleverly rhymed this shit.. lol i write raps in class too.. can u leave feedback on mine plz?

[Infliction]

thanks for the feedback, more ppl please! yea sure ill check urs out

[Rae]

i like it ... u should def. finish it (make it into a full song) ... good job!

[Infliction]

thanks rae

[ThomasAguanis]

nice man. you should def. continue it.

[Kez]

Yeah y'should, it's good

[Flamez]

nice man and yea u should continue it

[Infliction]

thanks for all the feedback guys, ill post the whole rhyme when its done

[DOPE]

you shud continute this man



and ALSO record it and when you say FUCK BUSH say it loud as u can and drop the beat on that point


PS: Fuck Bush

[Infliction]

you shud continute this man



and ALSO record it and when you say FUCK BUSH say it loud as u can and drop the beat on that point


PS: Fuck Bush

Lmao will do, thanks for the advice.