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Postby Flamez » Sep 9th, '06, 07:43

really good angie, liked it...and thats deep...
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Postby BaZZ » Sep 9th, '06, 08:02

yea i agree this is awesome... as it is deep and emotional and has good rhymes...
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Postby Chino562 » Sep 9th, '06, 08:06

that's cool angie.. i really liked it :'(
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Postby rhiannon » Sep 9th, '06, 08:19

:'( :'( :'( :'( :'( :'( :'( :'( that was awesome its really deep....nice work angie! :flowers:
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Postby katastrophe » Sep 9th, '06, 16:58

damn angie...thats some deep shit. good job though..i like it
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Postby Block » Sep 11th, '06, 01:53

i thought i posted on this, lol. anyway, nice :wub:.. you're offline tho :(
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Postby ThomasAguanis » Sep 11th, '06, 02:04

i almost missed this..

really deep angie and really great too.
great job. it's good to see you writing again.
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Postby ThomasAguanis » Sep 11th, '06, 02:16

Angie wrote:
ThomasAguanis wrote:i almost missed this..

really deep angie and really great too.
great job. it's good to see you writing again.
:D i never stopped tommer :smoking: i just dont like to post them anymore :sweating:


well thats good to know :8)
maybe you'll post more.... :whistle:
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Postby Slimm » Sep 11th, '06, 14:57

Nice angie very deep try to audio it ;)
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Postby j_shady » Sep 11th, '06, 15:55

wow Ang thats like the most emotion i ever got from you, you hide your pain well though w/ the smiles and jokes you give..but its also nice to see(or atleast read)another side of Angie

you ever thought of doing spoken word?
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Postby j_shady » Sep 12th, '06, 01:56

either way its good...you got talent :D
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Postby $0 R3@L » Sep 12th, '06, 10:16

thats tight angie :flower:

nice avatar too ang :happy: :worship:

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Postby polluted » Sep 12th, '06, 12:52

hey cool

i liked the beginning of the rhyme better...

seems like the ending is a bit forced....but it might be definitely redone or enhanced with something....whatever....


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